Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to give a direct and concise response with clear reasons. Avoid filler words and redundant phrases. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add specific reasons or examples using linking words.

例: Yes, I used to go to the library occasionally during my school and college days. I mainly went there to complete assignments and to explore new study materials that helped me improve my learning methods.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains many hesitations. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases like 'something like that.'

例: In the library, I usually work on assignments given by my teachers. Additionally, I like to explore new books and learn different language patterns to improve my skills and gain more experience.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with proper sentence structure. Explain the reason why you did not go to the library and what alternative you used, using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I did not go to the library as a child because my government school did not have one. Instead, I borrowed books from a local stationery shop to complete my assignments.

提案: Your answer is unclear and does not directly address the question. Try to give a concise and relevant response, even if you are unsure. You can express your uncertainty politely and provide a general opinion or guess, using linking words to structure your answer.

例: I'm not very sure about the habits of Chinese kids regarding library visits. However, I believe that many students in China do use libraries regularly to support their studies, as libraries are common in schools and communities.

× I opt in or occasionally go, occasionally go to the library for my, umm, assignment.

✓ I opted to occasionally go to the library for my assignments.

The phrase 'I opt in or occasionally go' is awkward and incorrect. The verb 'opt' should be in past tense 'opted' to match the past time frame 'in my college day and my school day'. Also, 'assignment' should be plural 'assignments' to match the context. The phrase 'opt in' is incorrect here; 'opt to' is more appropriate.

× Uh, and some practicing new things and uh, riches and new discovery and new pattern of study, how to make a homework and how to do it at that time.

✓ Uh, and some practice of new things and new discoveries and new study patterns, how to do homework and how to complete it at that time.

The phrase 'some practicing new things' is incorrect; 'some practice of new things' is better. 'Riches' is incorrect in this context and should be removed. 'New discovery' should be plural 'new discoveries'. 'New pattern of study' should be 'new study patterns'. 'Make a homework' is incorrect; 'do homework' or 'complete homework' is correct.

× In library, I usually, uh, do some assignment and homework which uh, have already given from my, uh, class work.

✓ In the library, I usually do some assignments and homework which have already been given from my classwork.

The phrase 'In library' is missing the definite article 'the'. 'Some assignment' should be plural 'some assignments'. 'Have already given' is passive and needs 'been' to form 'have already been given'. 'Class work' is better written as one word 'classwork'.

× And I also prefer to, uh, discover new books and new pattern of languages, uh, for my improvement of, uh, uh, my experience and something like that.

✓ And I also prefer to discover new books and new language patterns for the improvement of my experience and things like that.

'New pattern of languages' should be 'new language patterns'. 'Improvement of my experience' is better than 'my improvement of my experience'. The phrase 'something like that' is informal but acceptable; 'things like that' is more natural.

× Uh, at the time of childhood, I wasn't go to the library, but due to the, umm, uh, I studied a government school, there was no southern type of library.

✓ Uh, during my childhood, I didn't go to the library, but because I studied at a government school, there was no proper type of library.

'I wasn't go' is incorrect; the correct past tense negative form is 'I didn't go'. 'At the time of childhood' is better expressed as 'during my childhood'. 'Southern type of library' is unclear; 'proper type of library' or 'a library' is better.

× Uh, that where we go for a study and assignment purpose.

✓ That was where we went for study and assignment purposes.

The sentence lacks a verb; 'That where we go' should be 'That was where we went'. 'For a study and assignment purpose' should be plural 'for study and assignment purposes'.

× Uh, but I take a book from STEMI stationary houses for my assignments and work.

✓ But I took a book from STEMI stationary houses for my assignments and work.

The verb 'take' should be in past tense 'took' to match the past time frame.

× I don't have a certain permission about Chinese cultures, how the Chinese school is doing, uh, uh, for your, uh, for your, uh, for their students, uh, uh, to, or the library.

✓ I don't have certain knowledge about Chinese culture, how Chinese schools operate for their students or about their libraries.

'I don't have a certain permission' is incorrect; 'permission' is not the right word here, 'knowledge' fits better. 'Chinese cultures' should be singular 'Chinese culture'. The phrase 'for your, uh, for your, uh, for their students' is confusing and redundant; simplified to 'for their students'.

× And what is the rule? And, uh, in the country like, uh, China, there is certain, uh, there is, uh, some certain rule is that have, but I don't have certain.

✓ And what are the rules? In a country like China, there are certain rules, but I am not sure about them.

'What is the rule?' should be plural 'What are the rules?' to match 'certain rules'. 'There is certain' is incorrect; 'there are certain' is correct for plural 'rules'. 'Some certain rule is that have' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'there are certain rules'. 'I don't have certain' is incomplete; corrected to 'I am not sure about them'.