Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by making it more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy like "quiet, calm" which are similar, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use articles correctly, e.g., "the library" instead of "library."

例: Yes, I often go to the library when I have an important exam because it is a quiet and distraction-free place, which helps me focus better.

提案: Try to organize your answer with linking words and avoid repetition of 'important.' Also, 'headset with myself' is unnatural; say 'I bring a headset' or 'I listen to music.' Be more specific about the soundtracks to enrich your answer.

例: Usually, I bring my textbooks to the library and highlight key paragraphs. Additionally, I sometimes listen to instrumental music with my headset to help me concentrate.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm.' Make sure to finish your sentences and provide a clear reason. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Honestly, I did not go to the library as a child because I was an only child and my home was always calm and quiet, so I could study without distractions.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid vague phrases like 'rough children' and unsupported assumptions. Use linking words and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Since China has a large population, many children may use libraries to study and do homework, especially in urban areas where access to quiet study spaces at home is limited.

× Yes, if I have an important exam that I have to study in a distraction free place, I choose library.

✓ Yes, if I have an important exam that I have to study for in a distraction-free place, I choose the library.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'distraction free' should be hyphenated as 'distraction-free' when used as a compound adjective before a noun. Additionally, the verb 'study' requires the preposition 'for' when referring to preparing for an exam.

× Mostly libraries are quiet, calm and no one is there to distract you.

✓ Mostly, libraries are quiet and calm, and no one is there to distract you.

The sentence needs a comma after 'Mostly' as an introductory adverb. Also, 'quiet and calm' should be connected with 'and' to properly link the adjectives. The sentence originally lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas clearly.

× I often bring my important books and try to highlight the important paragraphs and also sometimes I bring a headset with myself and listen to some soundtracks.

✓ I often bring my important books and try to highlight the important paragraphs, and sometimes I also bring a headset with me and listen to some soundtracks.

The phrase 'bring a headset with myself' is incorrect; the correct reflexive pronoun is 'myself' only when the subject and object are the same, but here 'with me' is appropriate. Also, the sentence benefits from commas to separate clauses for clarity.

× Honestly, no uh, as I am the only child uh, every day our house was calm and quiet and no one distracted me and because of this I always had the chance to, umm, read my, uh, everything that I.

✓ Honestly, no. As I was the only child, every day our house was calm and quiet and no one distracted me, and because of this I always had the chance to read everything I wanted.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I am' with past tense context; it should be 'I was' to match the past time frame. The sentence is incomplete and awkward at the end; 'read my, uh, everything that I' is corrected to 'read everything I wanted' for clarity and completeness.

× Uh, logically China is a crowded country, so there may be lots of children in house, for example rough children.

✓ Uh, logically China is a crowded country, so there may be lots of children in houses, for example, unruly children.

The phrase 'in house' should be plural 'in houses' to indicate multiple homes. Also, 'rough children' is better expressed as 'unruly children' for natural English usage. A comma is added after 'for example' for correct punctuation.

× I think they may use library more than usual.

✓ I think they may use the library more than usual.

The noun 'library' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place. The modal verb 'may' is correctly used here to express possibility.