Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence stating your habit, then give one or two specific reasons. Use correct tense and avoid contradictions (e.g. “No, I don't” vs “I'm gonna go”). Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like ‘however’ or ‘recently’.

例: No, I don't go to the library very often. However, recently I have started going there to read romance novels and other books to improve my language skills and general knowledge.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and two specific activities with a linking word. Reduce hesitation and repetition; use correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘use the printer’ instead of ‘print mush machine’). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually read romance novels when I visit the library. In addition, I often use the printer there to print class documents or assignments.

提案: Answer directly and fix tense/number errors. Give a brief reason or a short example. Avoid unclear phrases like ‘until the 12:12’. Use one clear supporting detail to explain why you didn't go as a child.

例: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a child. My family didn't have a habit of visiting libraries, so I rarely had the chance to read there.

提案: Be cautious when generalizing. Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words like ‘for example’ or ‘also’. Use accurate language (e.g. ‘improve English skills’ and ‘learn more’ rather than ‘improve the IQ and accurate’).

例: In my experience, many Chinese children do visit libraries. For example, they often go to practise English and to borrow reference books for school, which helps them learn more effectively.

× No I don't I'm gonna go to the library because I found it boring but recently I have start to go to the library to read some romance books or or others to improve my skill and knowledge.

✓ No, I didn't used to go to the library because I found it boring, but recently I have started going to the library to read romance books and other genres to improve my skills and knowledge.

Multiple issues: the student intended to express a past habit that changed, so use 'didn't used to' or 'didn't use to' (subject-verb agreement with past habit) and 'found' is correct past. 'have start' is incorrect: after 'have' use the past participle 'started'. When describing continuing activity after 'start' use the -ing form 'started going'. 'gonna' is informal; use 'going to' or better here 'didn't use to' for past habit. 'romance books or or others' is redundant and unclear; use 'romance books and other genres'. 'skill' should be plural 'skills' when referring to multiple areas like reading and language.

× Well, I usually read some romance books, uh, romance books for a while. And additionally I, I, uh, I borrow the print mush machine to print some documents for my class.

✓ Well, I usually read romance books for a while. Additionally, I borrow the printer to print documents for my classes.

Remove repetition 'romance books, romance books'. 'print mush machine' is incorrect vocabulary; use 'printer'. 'borrow the printer' is acceptable if they use a shared printer; ensure article 'the' is correct. 'my class' should be plural 'my classes' if multiple classes, or 'for my class' if singular; context suggests 'classes'. Keep present simple 'I usually read' and 'I borrow' for habitual actions.

× Actually no, because when I was a kid until until the 12:12 I I never go to the library anytime.

✓ Actually no, because when I was a kid until I was 12, I never went to the library.

Use past tense 'went' for an action that did not occur in the past. Remove duplicate words 'until until' and extra 'I I'. 'the 12:12' is unclear; likely means 'I was 12' so correct to 'until I was 12'. 'anytime' is unnecessary with 'never'; 'I never went to the library' is sufficient.

× MMM uh, to be honest, yes, the Chinese kids always go through the library. One of the part is improve the English skills and knowledge. Uh, besides that you they improve the IQ and accurate.

✓ To be honest, yes, Chinese children often go to the library. One reason is to improve their English skills and knowledge. They also improve their general ability and accuracy in studies.

'Go through the library' is wrong preposition; use 'go to the library'. 'The Chinese kids' is too definite; use 'Chinese children' or 'Chinese kids' without 'the' for general statement (article error). 'One of the part' is ungrammatical; use 'One reason' or 'One purpose'. 'Improve the English skills' should be 'improve their English skills' (pronoun and possessive). 'They improve the IQ and accurate' is incorrect: 'IQ' is a specific measure and unlikely appropriate; better 'their general ability and accuracy' or 'academic performance'. Also fix pronoun 'you they' to 'they'.