Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Start with a direct, present-focused topic sentence and keep sentences concise. Avoid unnecessary background tense shifts and redundant phrasing. Add a brief reason with a linking word to make the answer coherent (e.g., 'because' or 'since').

例: Not really. I used to visit the university library a lot when I was a student, but since I graduated I rarely go because I now access resources online and work full-time.

提案: Good focus and a reason. Improve naturalness by starting with a clear topic sentence and adding one specific example of a database or type of article. Use a linking word like 'for example' to expand coherently.

例: I mainly use the library to search for academic articles. For example, I access paid databases like JSTOR or ScienceDirect to download research papers for my projects.

提案: Be concise and avoid fillers like 'uh'. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give specific activities and a linking word (e.g., 'and' or 'also') to connect ideas. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'children's section' instead of 'playground' if meant).

例: Yes, I often went to the local library near my house. I spent time in the children's section reading picture books and also played in the small outdoor playground next to the building.

提案: Start with a direct general statement, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your point clearer, and avoid absolute statements unless certain.

例: Yes, many Chinese children visit libraries regularly because schools encourage research for homework. For example, students often go there to find books and articles when preparing school projects or assignments.

× While I was a student in the university, I used to go to the library often, but nowadays I don't go that often after graduation.

✓ While I was a student at university, I used to go to the library often, but nowadays I don't go that often since I graduated.

The original contains two issues: wrong preposition 'in the university' and awkward time clause 'after graduation'. Use 'at university' (common collocation) and change 'after graduation' to 'since I graduated' to indicate a change from past to present. Also ensure tense consistency: 'used to' (past habit) vs 'don't go' (present habit) is correct; use 'since I graduated' to clarify timing.

× I search for online articles, especially because the library can offer access to many paid online databases.

✓ I search for online articles, especially because the library can provide access to many paid online databases.

The verb 'offer' is not incorrect grammatically but 'provide access to' is a more natural collocation here. No tense change is needed; present simple 'search' fits habitual action. This is a style/word choice improvement within allowed types (present participle not actually violated) but corrected to improve naturalness.

× Yes, there was one library not far from my house and uh, I used to go there partially for reading and, uh, also because they have a nice playground.

✓ Yes, there was a library not far from my house, and I used to go there partly to read and also because it had a nice playground.

Use 'a library' rather than 'one library' for naturalness; 'partially' is formal/awkward—use 'partly' or 'part of the time'. 'For reading' should be 'to read' (infinitive of purpose). The second clause refers to the past, so change 'they have' to 'it had' for correct agreement in number (library = it) and past tense consistency.

× Usually they go to the library because they are taught to research for answering their assignments.

✓ Usually they go to the library because they are taught to research to answer their assignments.

The phrase 'research for answering their assignments' is awkward. Use 'research to answer their assignments' (infinitive of purpose). Also 'they are taught to research' is acceptable present tense passive. No subject-verb agreement error, but rewording improves grammatical structure and clarity.