Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., saying 'library' twice close together), reduce hesitations, and add a brief reason with linking words. Use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'frequently' or 'regularly', 'purchase' instead of 'buy') and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I used to go to the library regularly, but now I rarely visit it because I usually purchase physical books online (for example, on Amazon). This is more convenient for me and I often prefer having my own copies at home.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'just', and combine similar ideas to be more concise. Use linking words ('also', 'for example') and give a specific example to make the answer more vivid. Vary vocabulary (e.g., 'search for', 'browse', 'periodicals'). Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: At the library I usually search for books I need and also browse periodicals. For example, I often read current newspapers and lifestyle magazines there because the library has a wide selection and a quiet place to read.

提案: Make tense and grammar consistent and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific example and use linking words ('because', 'for instance'). Correct verbs (e.g., 'I had to do research' not 'I have to'). Keep responses to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I went to the library often as a child because I had to do school research. For instance, when I was in elementary school I frequently borrowed reference books to complete my projects.

提案: Avoid starting with a negative or uncertain remark; instead state what you know or offer a clear opinion with a reason. Use hedging language briefly if unsure ('I’m not certain, but...') and provide a plausible reason or example. Use linking words and more precise vocabulary ('likely', 'often', 'visit libraries for study').

例: I'm not certain, but I imagine many Chinese children do visit libraries regularly, especially to study and borrow new books. For example, schools often encourage library use, so students may go there to do homework or read.

× I used to go to the library so often, but now I rarely go to the library.

✓ I used to go to the library very often, but now I rarely go there.

The original sentence mixes a past habitual action ('used to go') with present frequency correctly but is wordy and repeats 'to the library'. Replace the second phrase with 'there' for clarity and use 'very often' instead of 'so often' for formality. No tense change is needed; this keeps past vs present distinction correct.

× Instead I buy the physical books online, especially using Amazon.

✓ Instead, I buy physical books online, especially from Amazon.

'The physical books' is overly specific; use 'physical books' without 'the'. Use preposition 'from' with 'Amazon' rather than 'using Amazon'. Add a comma after 'Instead' for clarity.

× It is, uh, convenient means for me now and I have enough money to buy.

✓ It is a convenient option for me now, and I have enough money to buy them.

The phrase 'convenient means for me' is awkward; use 'a convenient option'. The verb 'to buy' needs an object ('them' referring to books). Add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× When I go to the library, I just look for the books I want to read.

✓ When I go to the library, I usually look for the books I want to read.

Using 'just' understates habitual action; 'usually' better matches the routine implied. Present tense is correct; this is a style/word choice improvement to reflect frequency.

× In addition, I like to read magazines or newspapers at the library because the libraries have a variety of magazines and newspapers.

✓ In addition, I like to read magazines and newspapers at the library because libraries have a wide variety of them.

Avoid repeating 'magazines and newspapers' twice. 'The libraries' is unnecessary generalization; use 'libraries'. 'A wide variety of them' is more natural and concise.

× Yes, so many times.

✓ Yes, many times.

'So many times' is colloquial and can be simplified to 'many times' to sound more natural in this context; tense is implied by previous question so no further change needed.

× Let's say when I was uh, elementary school student, I have to do research, uh, by borrowing some books at the library.

✓ Let's say when I was an elementary school student, I had to do research by borrowing books from the library.

Missing article 'an' before 'elementary school student'. The clause should be in past tense ('had to') to match 'when I was'. Use 'from the library' rather than 'at the library' for borrowing; remove filler 'uh' and 'some' for conciseness.

× So I usually go to the library to find a specific book.

✓ So I usually went to the library to find specific books.

Because the speaker is describing childhood habits, past tense 'went' is appropriate rather than present 'go'. Also match plurality: 'specific books' is more natural when describing repeated searches.

× Oh, I don't know much about that because I'm Japanese, not Chinese.

✓ Oh, I don't know much about that because I'm Japanese, not Chinese.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Including it here to confirm there's no pronoun error. (Left unchanged.)

× But I imagine that Chinese also go to the library to look for the new books.

✓ But I imagine that Chinese people also go to the library to look for new books.

Use 'Chinese people' rather than just 'Chinese' for clarity. Drop 'the' before 'new books' because it is non-specific. This corrects quantifier/article usage and improves naturalness.