Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use correct verb forms and articles. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like 'resource' used as a verb and simplify 'some study room'.

例: Yes. I go to the library almost every weekday to study and to book a group study room. For example, I usually reserve a small room on Mondays so my classmates and I can discuss assignments together.

提案: Improve grammar (use correct verb tenses and forms) and use linking words to connect ideas. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific activities and a short example or reason.

例: I usually do my assignments and look for research materials in the library. Additionally, I often hold team meetings there because we can book a quiet study room to discuss our group projects.

提案: Use past tense consistently and correct word choice. Start with a clear past-tense statement, then give one specific detail about frequency or an activity. Remove filler sounds and repetitions.

例: Yes, I did. Both my primary and secondary schools had libraries, and we often had library lessons where my classmates and I could borrow books once a week.

提案: Avoid vague hedging and provide a clear opinion or say you are not sure. Use respectful and accurate phrasing when speaking about another country. Give a brief reason if you express an opinion, using linking words.

例: I'm not sure because I'm Vietnamese and don't have direct experience, but I think many Chinese children do go to libraries because education and studying are highly valued in their culture.

× Yes, I go to the library almost every class day to resource and book some study room for my team to discuss other topics that we have in class.

✓ Yes, I go to the library almost every class day to find resources and book a study room for my team to discuss other topics from class.

The student used 'to resource' and 'book some study room' incorrectly. 'Resource' as a verb is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'find resources' or 'use resources'. Also use the noun phrase 'a study room' (singular) rather than 'some study room'. Use 'from class' or 'from our class' to indicate topics originating in class. Suggested improvement: replace incorrect verb forms with 'find' and use proper articles before singular countable nouns (a study room).

× As I mentioned, I usually do my assignment and finding resource in the library.

✓ As I mentioned, I usually do my assignments and find resources in the library.

Mixed forms: 'do' (base verb) is paired with 'finding' (gerund) which is inconsistent. Use parallel base verbs: 'do' and 'find', and plural 'assignments' and 'resources' for natural collocation. Suggested improvement: keep verb forms parallel and use plural nouns for general activities ('assignments', 'resources').

× Also I have some team meeting to to keep on with the the team assignment in some booking room of the library.

✓ Also I have some team meetings to keep up with the team assignment in a booked room in the library.

Problems: 'to to' is a typo; 'keep on with' is unnatural — use 'keep up with'; 'some team meeting' should be 'some team meetings' or 'a team meeting' depending on frequency; 'some booking room' is incorrect — use 'a booked room' or 'a study room reserved' and 'in the library' placement corrected. Suggested improvement: remove duplicate 'to', use natural phrasal verb 'keep up with', correct noun number and adjective order ('booked room').

× MMM I have a library in my primary school and secondary school so we also have the library class when me and my classmate can can visit the the school library to portal book.

✓ I had a library in my primary school and in my secondary school, so we also had library classes when my classmates and I could visit the school library to borrow books.

Tense: question asked about past (when you were a kid), so use past tense ('had', 'had'). Pronoun order: 'my classmates and I' is correct subject order. 'Can can' is duplicated; modal should be past 'could' to match past time. 'Portal book' is incorrect; likely intended 'borrow books'. Suggested improvement: use past tense consistently, correct pronoun order, remove duplicates, and replace wrong lexical items with 'borrow books'.

× I don't know because I'm a Vietnamese kid, so, uh, I don't have any contact about Chinese kid, but I think yes.

✓ I don't know because I'm Vietnamese, so I don't have any contact with Chinese kids, but I think they probably do go to the library.

Pronoun and noun number issues: 'a Vietnamese kid' is acceptable but natural phrasing is 'I'm Vietnamese'. 'Any contact about Chinese kid' is incorrect — use 'contact with Chinese kids' (plural). Also the response 'I think yes' is vague; better to say 'I think they probably do go to the library.' Suggested improvement: use 'contact with' for relationships and plural 'kids' when speaking generally.

× Cause umm Chi China have a really good study traditional.

✓ Because China has a really strong study tradition.

Multiple issues: 'Cause' is informal; use 'Because' or 'Since'. 'Chi China' is incorrect; use 'China'. Subject-verb agreement also involved ('China has'). 'Study traditional' is wrong word order and choice — use 'study tradition' or 'academic tradition' and 'strong' or 'good' as an adjective. Suggested improvement: use correct subject-verb agreement ('China has') and correct noun phrases ('study tradition' or 'academic tradition').

× So yeah, maybe.

✓ So yes, maybe.

Very minor: 'yeah' is informal; 'yes' is more appropriate in a short spoken answer. No major grammatical error beyond register. Suggested improvement: prefer 'yes' in semi-formal contexts.