Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, concise topic sentence that answers the question first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases; use correct tense and simpler vocabulary. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use a linking phrase such as 'However' or 'In the past' to contrast past and future habits.

例: I don't go to the library very often now. I haven't visited one since I finished secondary school, but I plan to go more regularly in the future because I enjoy reading and want a quiet place to study.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about what you usually do in the library, use correct verb tenses, and provide specific details. Avoid filler words and unfinished sentences. Use a linking word like 'usually' or 'recently' properly and give a contrast if your habits changed.

例: When I was a student, I usually used the library to print documents and complete homework assignments. Recently, I haven't used the library much and I now print most materials at my office instead.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense consistently. Give one or two specific memories or reasons to make the answer vivid (for example, favorite books or activities). Remove unclear phrases and correct grammar (e.g., 'when I was a child').

例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child. I remember spending afternoons there reading adventure stories in the cool, quiet rooms; I especially liked borrowing picture books and magazines.

提案: Answer the question directly then give a brief reason or acknowledge uncertainty if you are not sure. Use accurate vocabulary ('kids' not 'keys') and avoid repeating phrases. Use a linking phrase like 'However' or 'In my experience'.

例: I'm not Chinese, so I'm not certain, but I think many Chinese children do go to libraries. In my experience, children in many countries visit libraries to borrow books and attend reading activities.

× Well, I will say it's a long decade that I haven't been in the library since I finished my secondary college, but in the future, I would love to come to the library more often because I I really enjoy reading Book bus because I'm a really.

✓ Well, I would say it has been a long decade since I last went to the library after I finished secondary school, but in the future I would love to visit the library more often because I really enjoy reading.

The original mixes future marker 'will say' and present perfect/tense incorrectly. Use 'would say' for tentative opinion and present perfect 'has been... since I last went' to indicate time from past to now. 'Secondary college' is not standard; 'secondary school' is correct. Remove repeated words and unclear fragments. Suggestion: use 'I would say' for softening, 'it has been... since I last went' for duration, and 'visit' instead of 'come to' for clarity.

× When I was a student, I usually go to the library for printing the document from the files. Umm, just basically just all the homeworks and assignment that I need to print out. But uh, recently I usually go to the office just to bring some umm.

✓ When I was a student, I usually went to the library to print documents from files, basically all the homework and assignments I needed to print. Recently I usually go to the office to print things.

The main issue is inconsistent tense: 'When I was' sets past context, so use past 'usually went'. 'Printing the document from the files' is unnatural; use 'to print documents from files'. 'Homeworks' is uncountable/incorrect plural; use 'homework' or 'assignments' for countable. The second sentence used 'recently' (present context) so 'I usually go to the office' is acceptable; clarify purpose 'to print things'. Suggestion: keep tenses consistent within each time frame and correct noun forms.

× Yes, I remember when I want a choice, I always love to go to the libraries because I enjoy reading book under the air conditioner and where they selling all the interesting book that I love to read. Yeah, when I want to try, I really enjoy going to the library.

✓ Yes, I remember that when I was a child, I always loved going to the library because I enjoyed reading books under the air conditioner and they sold many interesting books that I liked to read. Yes, when I was young I really enjoyed going to the library.

Multiple past-tense errors: 'when I want a choice' seems intended as 'when I was a child' or 'when I was younger'; use past 'was'. Verbs should be past: 'always loved', 'enjoyed'. 'Reading book' should be plural 'reading books'. 'They selling' requires past 'they sold'. Suggestion: identify intended time frame and use past tense consistently, pluralize countable nouns.

× Well, I'm not a Chinese but I believe more of the keys around the world love to go to the library because like I said before, they they I love enjoying reading.

✓ Well, I'm not Chinese, but I believe many kids around the world love to go to the library because, as I said before, they enjoy reading.

Pronoun and noun choice errors: 'a Chinese' is awkward; use 'Chinese' as adjective or 'a Chinese person'. 'More of the keys' seems to mean 'many kids'—correct to 'many kids'. Repetition 'they they I love enjoying reading' is ungrammatical; clarify to 'they enjoy reading'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and avoid unnecessary repetitions; ensure pronouns match antecedents.