Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "also" and "as well").

例: Not anymore. When I was at university I often used the campus library to study and meet my project team because it was quiet and seeing other students study motivated me to concentrate.

提案: Correct small grammar issues and tighten phrasing. Give a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to organize activities (e.g., "mainly...; also...; sometimes..."). Be specific about types of assignments or projects to add detail.

例: Mostly I read textbooks to review lectures and prepare for upcoming lessons; I also work on assignments at the study carrels, and sometimes I meet classmates there to discuss and finish group projects.

提案: Fix grammar and clarity issues and avoid contradictory phrasing ("I really went" vs "was only for borrowing"). Provide a concise topic sentence then give two clear reasons with linking words. Correct word forms (e.g., "doing" not "did doing").

例: Not much. The school library only lent books and wasn’t suitable for studying independently, and there was no public library in my town, so I usually read and did my homework at home instead.

提案: Answer the question directly and avoid mixing countries (examiner asked about Chinese kids but you referred to Vietnamese children). Make one clear opinion sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar ("school busy school schedules").

例: I'm not sure about China, but in Vietnam children rarely go to public libraries. Firstly, young children depend on parents and study at home for convenience; secondly, busy school timetables and extra classes leave little free time for library visits.

× No, I don't go to the library often now, but when I was a student at university I usually went there to study and attend team meetings.

✓ No, I don't go to the library often now, but when I was a student at university I usually went there to study and attend team meetings.

The sentence is largely correct but contains a minor stylistic tense consideration: 'now' with 'I don't go' correctly uses present simple to describe current habitual action, and 'when I was a student... I usually went' correctly uses past habitual. No grammatical change required. Keep present simple for current habits and past simple for past habits.

× A library is a suitable place to concentrate because it's quiet and seeing others students working hard also motivates me to focus as well.

✓ The library is a suitable place to concentrate because it's quiet, and seeing other students working hard also motivates me to focus.

Use of articles: 'A library' implies any library, but the student refers to libraries in general or the library context just mentioned, so 'The library' or simply 'Libraries' is better. 'others students' is incorrect; use 'other students' (no possessive). Also remove redundant 'as well' and add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× Most of the time in the library I read textbooks to review what I was taught and to prepare for the next lessons.

✓ Most of the time in the library I read textbooks to review what I was taught and to prepare for the next lessons.

This sentence is grammatically correct. Article 'the library' is appropriate because it refers to the library context already mentioned. No correction necessary.

× I also do assignment there and sometimes I meet with my teammates to discuss and finish the group project together.

✓ I also do assignments there, and sometimes I meet with my teammates to discuss and finish our group project together.

'Do assignment' is incorrect: use the plural 'assignments' or 'an assignment'. Added comma before 'and' for clarity. 'the group project' can be 'our group project' to show possession, and 'together' is redundant after 'discuss and finish', so keep if desired but better to remove redundancy.

× I really went to the library when I was a child because the school library was only for borrowing books and wasn't suitable for self studying.

✓ I often went to the library when I was a child because the school library was only for borrowing books and wasn't suitable for self-study.

'I really went' is odd for frequency; use 'I often went' to indicate regular visits. 'self studying' should be hyphenated or a noun: 'self-study'. Also tense 'was' correctly used for past descriptions.

× In addition, there was no Public Library in my city too, so I had to spend time reading and did doing my homework at home instead.

✓ In addition, there was no public library in my city, so I had to spend time reading and do my homework at home instead.

'Public Library' should not be capitalized here; use 'public library'. 'too' is redundant with 'in addition' so remove. 'did doing my homework' is ungrammatical; use 'do my homework' to match 'had to' + base verb. Also remove comma splice by adjusting phrasing.

× I don't think Vietnamese children visit libraries very often because many are still quite young and depend heavily on their parents, so they should study at home where it feels safer and more convenient for caregivers to supervise them.

✓ I don't think Vietnamese children visit libraries very often because many are still quite young and depend heavily on their parents, so they should study at home where it feels safer and more convenient for caregivers to supervise them.

Sentence is grammatically correct; article usage is appropriate. No change needed.

× Furthermore, school busy school schedules and after school classes leave little free time for library visits.

✓ Furthermore, busy school schedules and after-school classes leave little free time for library visits.

Original repeats 'school' twice: 'school busy school schedules' is ungrammatical. Correct to 'busy school schedules'. 'after school classes' should be hyphenated as 'after-school classes' when used as a compound adjective.