Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid long unclear phrases and correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles). Keep to under five sentences.

例: No, I don't go to the library very often because I have most books and online resources at home. For example, I use my laptop and phone to read articles and do research, which is faster for me. Also, going to a library takes extra travel time, so I prefer studying at home.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating main activities, use linking words (for example, additionally) and give specific examples. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases; use correct nouns and verbs. Keep answers focused and coherent within three sentences.

例: When I go to the library, I usually read academic books and take notes for my research. For example, I consult textbooks on economics and copy useful references into my notebook. Additionally, I sometimes borrow novels to relax after studying.

提案: Answer directly and briefly, then add one or two specific details explaining why. Use correct grammar (e.g., 'we had full access to the library' not 'I have a full access') and avoid repeating ideas. Limit to two or three sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I did. My school required students to use the library and our tuition included full access, so I often went there to study and borrow books for class assignments.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or an example, and avoid making broad generalizations. Use careful phrasing (e.g., 'I’m not sure' or 'in my experience') and correct grammar. Keep to two sentences maximum.

例: I'm not sure if Chinese children go to libraries more often than children elsewhere, but in my experience many families encourage studying at home. For example, students often use after-school tutoring and online resources instead of visiting public libraries.

× No, I do not go to the library more often it is because I just all the necessary books and resources in my house.

✓ No, I do not go to the library often because I already have all the necessary books and resources at home.

Run-on sentence and missing auxiliary/verb forms. The original combined two independent clauses without proper punctuation or conjunction. 'More often' is unnecessary; use 'often'. 'I just all the necessary books' lacks a verb—use 'I already have'. Preposition 'in' for home should be 'at'. Suggestion: split ideas clearly and include required verbs: 'I do not go to the library often because I already have all the necessary books and resources at home.'

× Like I have my own computer, laptops, cell phones that I could use if I want to read something or to do researching.

✓ For example, I have my own computer, laptop, and cell phone that I can use if I want to read something or do research.

Plural agreement and word choice issues. Use singular 'laptop' and 'cell phone' in a list, and 'can' is more appropriate than 'could' for present ability. 'To do researching' is incorrect; use the noun 'research' or the gerund 'do research'. Also begin lists with a clearer connector such as 'for example'.

× Going to the library will take me a lot of time in airport because it's.

✓ Going to the library would take a lot of my time because it is far and requires travel.

Incomplete sentence and wrong lexical items. 'In airport' is incorrect and the clause ends abruptly with 'because it's.' Clarify reason: state what 'it' refers to. Use conditional 'would take' to express hypothetical time cost. Suggestion: always complete subordinate clauses and use correct place expressions like 'at the airport' only when relevant; here 'requires travel' or 'is far' fits better.

× So when I go to the library, of course I will read a lot of books that I could, uh, take note and good health to my research or, uh, take note of all the knowledge information that I want to have.

✓ When I go to the library, I usually read many books, take notes for my research, and collect the information I need.

Tense and modality misuse plus word choice errors. Mixing 'will' with 'could' creates inconsistency; habitual action uses present simple 'I usually read'. 'Take note and good health to my research' is meaningless—should be 'take notes for my research'. 'Knowledge information' is redundant; use 'information' or 'knowledge'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and correct collocations like 'take notes' and 'for my research'.

× Also eyebrows novels that could help my personal.

✓ Also, I read novels that could help me personally.

Fragment and wrong words. 'Eyebrows' is incorrect—likely a misrecognition; 'novels that could help my personal' is ungrammatical. Use a full clause 'I read novels that could help me personally' or specify how they help. Include subject and appropriate pronoun 'me'.

× Of course I did because our schools, teachers, professors required us to do so.

✓ Of course I did because our schools, teachers, and professors required us to do so.

Missing conjunction/commas: list needs 'and' before last item. Tense 'did' and 'required' are consistent in past—this sentence is acceptable aside from punctuation. Suggestion: include 'and' in lists and commas for clarity.

× So I have to go to the library and I have a full access of library during that time.

✓ So I had to go to the library and I had full access to the library during that time.

Tense and wrong quantifier/preposition. Because talking about past, use past tense 'had' instead of 'have'. 'A full access of library' is incorrect; use 'full access to the library' without the article 'a' before 'full access'. Suggestion: match tense to context and use correct preposition 'access to'.

× It is including our tuition fee and as a student we are needed and required to go to the library.

✓ It was included in our tuition fee, and as students we were required to go to the library.

Tense and preposition errors. Use past tense 'was included' to match past context. 'Including our tuition fee' is incorrect structure; use 'included in our tuition fee'. 'As a student we are needed and required' is wordy and ungrammatical—use 'as students we were required'. Suggestion: simplify and ensure tense consistency.

× Actually, not specifically, I don't know if they go to the library more often than other kids in the Asian and position, but I think they're intelligent people because there's a lot of discoveries that was made by Chinese people, I think.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure if they go to the library more often than other children in Asia, but I think many Chinese people are intelligent because there have been many discoveries made by Chinese people.

Multiple issues: awkward phrasing, wrong noun forms and tense. 'Not specifically' and 'in the Asian and position' are incorrect; use 'I'm not sure' and 'in Asia'. Use 'children' instead of 'kids' for formality. 'A lot of discoveries that was made' has subject-verb disagreement; use 'discoveries that were made' or 'there have been many discoveries made'. Suggestion: simplify structure, correct geographic term 'Asia', and ensure subject-verb agreement and tense consistency.