Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with good reasons, but it's slightly repetitive ("usually" used twice) and slightly long. Improve by starting with a concise topic sentence, reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail (e.g., a routine or favorite spot) using a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I go to my university library almost every day because I need a quiet place to study for classes and essays. For example, I usually sit on the third floor near the windows, where the cozy, historic atmosphere helps me concentrate.

提案: The answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but repeats "usually" and mixes two different activities (reading and napping) without a clear linking structure. Make sentences more concise, avoid repetition, and use a linking word to separate activities. Add a specific example of a book or nap routine to sound natural.

例: In the library I usually search for Japanese literature to relax my mind after studying in English. Also, because it is very quiet, I sometimes take a short 20-minute nap on the upper floor to recharge before evening classes.

提案: Your response is informative and adds context, which is good, but it moves quickly into broader political detail. Keep the answer focused on your childhood experience first, then briefly mention the changes. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "later") and one concise supporting detail about how access was poor.

例: No, I rarely went to the local library as a child because it was far from my home and public transport was limited. However, the situation has changed: the local government is planning to move the library to the city centre to make it more accessible.

提案: Good observation and reasonable reasons, but the answer repeats ideas about electronic access. Strengthen it by giving a specific example or brief comparison and use a linking word to organize points (e.g., "Firstly", "Secondly"). Avoid saying the same idea twice.

例: I don't think many Chinese children visit libraries regularly. Firstly, most young people prefer reading on smartphones and tablets, and secondly, libraries increasingly offer digital collections, which reduces the need to visit in person.

× This is mainly because I'm a student and have to study a lot to prepare for everyday's classes and essays.

✓ This is mainly because I'm a student and have to study a lot to prepare for everyday classes and essays.

The phrase 'everyday's classes' incorrectly uses a possessive form. 'Everyday' as an adjective means 'ordinary' and should directly modify the noun 'classes' without an apostrophe. Use 'everyday classes' to mean the regular classes you attend. Suggestion: Remove the apostrophe when using 'everyday' as an adjective: 'everyday classes.'

× In addition, my university library is well known for its traditional history, so the atmosphere there is very cozy and it's a great place to focus on studying.

✓ In addition, my university library is well known for its long history, so the atmosphere there is very cozy and it's a great place to focus on studying.

The phrase 'traditional history' is awkward and not the typical collocation to express an institution's long-established past. 'Long history' or 'rich history' are standard collocations. Use 'long history' here to convey that the library has existed for a long time. Suggestion: Replace 'traditional history' with 'long history' or 'rich history.'

× I usually go to my university's library to look for Japanese books because I usually focus on studying in English, so I want to refresh my mind by reading Japanese books.

✓ I usually go to my university's library to look for Japanese books because I usually study in English, so I want to refresh my mind by reading Japanese books.

The phrase 'focus on studying in English' is grammatical but wordy; 'study in English' is more natural and concise in this context. This is a style improvement rather than a strict grammatical error. It keeps present habitual tense consistent. Suggestion: Use the simpler verb phrase 'study in English' instead of 'focus on studying in English.'

× In addition, the atmosphere is so quiet that I can sleep well, so I sometimes go there to take a nap.

✓ In addition, the atmosphere is so quiet that I can sleep well; I sometimes go there to take a nap.

The original sentence is understandable but uses two 'so' clauses in one sentence which is repetitive. Replacing the second 'so' with a semicolon or conjunction improves clarity. This is a style/clarity improvement within present tense. Suggestion: Avoid repeating 'so' in close proximity; connect the clauses more smoothly.

× No, I didn't go to the local library in my childhood, mainly because access was very poor.

✓ No, I didn't go to the local library in my childhood, mainly because access was very poor.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; past simple 'didn't go' and 'was' are correctly used to describe past situations. No correction needed. (Included only to show it matches the expected tense.)

× Therefore, improving access to the library was an important political issue in my hometown.

✓ Therefore, improving access to the library was an important political issue in my hometown.

This sentence is grammatically correct: it uses past tense 'was' appropriately to refer to a past political issue. No correction needed.

× The local government is now trying to relocate it and build a new one in the center of city.

✓ The local government is now trying to relocate it and build a new one in the center of the city.

The phrase 'center of city' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'city'. In English, singular countable nouns referring to a specific place usually need 'the'. Use 'the center of the city.' Suggestion: Add 'the' before 'city.'

× No, I don't think many Chinese kids go to libraries very often, mainly because they tend to read books and reading materials through smartphones and laptops instead of going to libraries.

✓ No, I don't think many Chinese kids go to libraries very often, mainly because they tend to read books and other reading materials on smartphones and laptops instead of going to libraries.

The phrase 'through smartphones and laptops' is not the usual preposition for consuming digital content. Use 'on' for devices or 'via' for channels. Also 'reading materials' is better as 'other reading materials' for clarity. This is an issue of collocation and preposition choice. Suggestion: Use 'on smartphones and laptops' or 'via smartphones and laptops.'

× In addition, many libraries try to make books available through electronic devices.

✓ In addition, many libraries try to make books available on electronic devices.

Similar to the previous sentence, 'through electronic devices' is less natural here; 'on electronic devices' or 'in electronic form' are better collocations to describe digital availability. Use 'on' or rephrase as 'in electronic form.' Suggestion: Use 'on electronic devices' or 'in electronic form.'