Library— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct repetitions and grammar, and give a clear reason plus a short follow-up detail. Use one topic sentence then one supporting sentence with linking word(s).

例: No, I don't often go to the library now because I have a full-time job. As a result, I usually spend my free time running errands or doing housework rather than visiting a library.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence about your typical activity, avoid filler words, and use linking words to add a specific example or result. Keep it within 2–3 concise sentences.

例: In college I mainly used the library for studying and research because it had many reference books. For example, I often consulted textbooks and academic journals there to prepare essays and assignments.

提案: Avoid contradicting yourself. Give a clear yes/no answer and then a brief specific detail about what you did there, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did go to the library as a child. For instance, in elementary and high school I regularly borrowed books and used the library to research topics for school projects.

提案: Be careful with generalizations and finish your thought. Start with a clear opinion, acknowledge uncertainty, and give a brief reason or comparison with an example. Use linking words to complete the sentence.

例: I'm not certain, but I think many Chinese children do use libraries because education is highly valued. However, with the rise of online resources, some students now prefer digital materials instead of visiting a library.

× As of now I I don't because I'm I'm already working and my life this past few years is like housework and other public places but not in the library and umm.

✓ As of now I don't, because I'm already working and for the past few years my life has been mostly housework and going to other public places, but not the library.

Incorrect present/present perfect tense and awkward phrase order. 'My life this past few years is' should be 'my life has been for the past few years' to show an action/state continuing up to the present. Remove duplicated words and reorder phrases for clarity. Use present simple 'I don't' for current habit and present perfect 'has been' for a situation spanning several years.

× Back in college, uh, the library, it was the source of our information regarding the subjects that we need to learn.

✓ Back in college, the library was the source of our information regarding the subjects that we needed to learn.

Tense mismatch: 'need' should be past tense 'needed' because 'back in college' refers to the past. Use past simple 'needed' to match 'was' and the past time reference.

× And we usually do done some research in the library and during college years and also, umm, uh.

✓ We usually did some research in the library during our college years.

Word order and auxiliary misuse: 'do done' is incorrect. Use simple past 'did' or 'conducted' to describe past habitual actions. Remove redundant connectors ('and', 'also') and place the time expression 'during our college years' at the end or after the verb for clarity.

× When I was a kid like like elementary and high school, I usually went to the library to borrow books and to also, umm, research for the subjects that.

✓ When I was a kid in elementary and high school, I usually went to the library to borrow books and to do research for my subjects.

Awkward phrasing and sentence fragment: 'like like elementary and high school' should be 'in elementary and high school.' 'To also, research' is awkward; use 'to do research.' Complete the object of 'research' by using 'for my subjects.' Maintain past tense 'went' and 'usually' to indicate past habit.

× I think uh, they are. I am not a Chinese but I am a Filipino. But I think Chinese people are fond of going to the library to have some research.

✓ I think they are. I am not Chinese; I am Filipino. But I think Chinese people are fond of going to the library to do research.

Pronoun and article issues: 'I am not a Chinese' is incorrect — use 'I am not Chinese.' Remove the article before nationality. 'To have some research' is unnatural; use 'to do research.' Also replace the comma splice with clearer punctuation.

× Even though there are umm available. There are some textbooks available online and they.

✓ Even though some textbooks are available online, people still go to the library.

Fragmented sentences and unclear subject: 'Even though there are umm available.' is a fragment; specify what is available. The original ends with 'and they.' which is incomplete. Combine into a complete sentence that contrasts online availability with library use.