Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details about how often you buy shoes and why. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I like to have different styles for various occasions. I usually buy new shoes every few months, especially for jogging or formal events.

提案: Your answer is understandable but has some grammatical mistakes and filler words. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe it's important to try them on in person to ensure they fit well and are comfortable.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many hesitations. Try to directly answer the question with a clear amount or range, then explain why you spend that much using specific reasons and linking words.

例: I usually spend around $80 to $100 on shoes because I believe investing in good quality footwear is important for foot health and comfort.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains unclear phrases. Provide a clear topic sentence stating your preference or approach, then explain with specific details using linking words for coherence.

例: I find it difficult to choose between fashionable and comfortable shoes. Therefore, I try to find a balance by selecting shoes that look good but are also comfortable to wear.

× I like to buy shoes like I love to have them buy their styles and proposals, like shoes for jogging or shoes for former events.

✓ I like to buy shoes because I love to have them in different styles and designs, like shoes for jogging or shoes for formal events.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'buy' instead of 'in' and 'proposals' instead of 'designs'. Also, 'former events' should be 'formal events'. The plural form 'shoes' is correct, but the sentence structure and word choice need correction for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× And I buy it.

✓ And I buy them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular, but 'shoes' is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'them' to agree in number.

× when buying a shoes

✓ when buying shoes

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'shoes'. No article is needed before plural nouns when speaking generally.

× I think that it's really important to wear it in person

✓ I think that it's really important to try them on in person

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes' which is plural. Also, 'wear it in person' is incorrect in this context; the correct phrase is 'try them on in person' when referring to shoes.

× when buying a shoes

✓ when buying shoes

The article 'a' should not be used before the plural noun 'shoes'. The correct form is 'when buying shoes'.

× Uh, I think it's really important to wear good shoes, umm, because of health, uh, when you get tired, uh, with your feet, it is really, uh, demanding.

✓ Uh, I think it's really important to wear good shoes for health because when your feet get tired, it is really demanding.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and unclear structure. 'Because of health' is vague; 'for health' is clearer. Also, 'when you get tired with your feet' is incorrect; it should be 'when your feet get tired'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, it's so hard, it's hard to cushion.

✓ Well, it's so hard; it's hard to choose.

The word 'cushion' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is likely 'choose'. Also, the sentence needs proper punctuation to separate the two clauses.

× Like I try to find some balance between passion and comfort.

✓ I try to find some balance between fashion and comfort.

The word 'passion' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'fashion'. Also, starting the sentence with 'Like' is informal and unnecessary in this context.