Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains a confusing phrase "change how often looks" which affects naturalness and clarity. Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid redundancy. Also, limit your answer to around 4-5 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love buying shoes because they can completely change the way an outfit looks. I usually buy new shoes every month to keep up with the latest trends. Moreover, I often shop online since there is a wide variety to choose from.

提案: Your answer is short and lacks linking words and detail. Also, the phrase "I can I choose from home in comfortable way" is grammatically incorrect. Try to expand your answer with reasons and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. It is very convenient because I can choose from a wide range of options without leaving my home. Furthermore, shopping online saves me time and often offers better prices.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting minor grammar errors and adding linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to be more specific about the amount or frequency to enrich your response.

例: I usually spend quite a lot of money on shoes because I like to have different pairs for various occasions. Since shoes are an important part of fashion, I try to keep up with the latest trends to ensure my style is up to date.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors such as "a comfortable shoes" and lacks linking words. Try to combine your ideas more smoothly and use correct grammar for singular/plural nouns.

例: I actually prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day, so they help me avoid foot pain and blisters. However, I also like shoes that look good, so I try to find a balance between comfort and style.

× I think they can change how often looks.

✓ I think they can change how one looks.

The pronoun 'often' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'one' to refer to a person in a general sense. Using 'one' is appropriate when making general statements about people.

× It's easy because I can I choose from home in comfortable way.

✓ It's easy because I can choose from home in a comfortable way.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'comfortable way'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article or determiner.

× I spend a lot on shoes because I like to buy different pairs for every occasions.

✓ I spend a lot on shoes because I like to buy different pairs for every occasion.

The word 'occasions' is plural but preceded by 'every', which requires a singular noun. 'Every' is used with singular countable nouns.

× I actually prefer a comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day.

✓ I actually prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot every day.

The phrase 'a comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The article should be removed to match the plural noun.

× Also I prefer a good looking one.

✓ Also, I prefer a good-looking one.

The phrase 'good looking' should be hyphenated as 'good-looking' when used as a compound adjective before a noun or pronoun. Additionally, a comma after 'Also' improves sentence clarity.