Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and grammatically correct. For example, instead of "catch up new technology," you can say "keep up with the latest trends or technology." Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love buying shoes and usually purchase a new pair once a month to keep up with the latest trends.

提案: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unnatural phrases. For example, "a new shoes" should be "new shoes" (no article), and "buy a footwear" should be "buy footwear" or "buy shoes." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because sometimes I don't have enough time to go shopping in person.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use present tense "spend" instead of "spent" for habitual actions. Also, say "I usually spend about 100,000 Japanese yen on new running shoes." Avoid repeating the currency unnecessarily and use linking words to connect sentences.

例: I usually spend about 100,000 Japanese yen on new running shoes. For example, I recently bought a pair that cost 120,000 yen.

提案: Your answer has grammar errors and unnatural expressions. Use present tense "walk" instead of "walked" for habitual actions. Also, say "to avoid getting tired" instead of "to avoid be tired." Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk long distances every day to avoid getting tired. Therefore, I always choose comfortable running shoes.

× I often buy shoes once a month because I want to catch up new technology.

✓ I often buy shoes once a month because I want to catch up on new technology.

The verb 'catch up' requires the preposition 'on' to indicate the object of catching up. Without 'on', the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× Yes, I have bought a new shoes online because sometimes I didn't have much time to buy a footwear.

✓ Yes, I have bought new shoes online because sometimes I didn't have much time to buy footwear.

The phrase 'a new shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'footwear' is an uncountable noun and does not need an article 'a'.

× Usually I spent a 100,000 Japanese yen for new running shoes.

✓ Usually I spend 100,000 Japanese yen on new running shoes.

The adverb 'usually' indicates a habitual action, so the present tense 'spend' should be used instead of past tense 'spent'. Also, 'a' before '100,000' is unnecessary and 'on' is the correct preposition for spending money.

× For example, I bought a 120,000 Japanese yen to running shoes.

✓ For example, I bought running shoes for 120,000 Japanese yen.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect here; 'for' is used to indicate the price paid. Also, 'a' before '120,000' is unnecessary and the word order is corrected for natural English.

× I definitely love the comfortable shoes because every day I walked for a long distance to avoid be tired.

✓ I definitely love comfortable shoes because every day I walk a long distance to avoid being tired.

The sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'walk' should be used instead of past tense 'walked'. Also, 'avoid be tired' is incorrect; the gerund form 'being tired' is required after 'avoid'.