Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs improvement in grammar and clarity. Try to avoid redundancy and use correct word forms. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'shoes' and 'suits', be consistent and precise.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, especially sports shoes because they make me feel comfortable when I walk. I usually buy new shoes when I have a special occasion or need them.

提案: Your answer has grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Use correct verb tenses and clearer explanations. Also, avoid confusing phrases like 'it's same as a photographs'. Try to explain your reasons more clearly and logically.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I am worried about the quality. Sometimes, the products look different in photos and the delivery can be unreliable.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammar errors. Focus on answering the question directly with clear sentences. Avoid irrelevant words like 'massage' and repeat words. Use linking words to explain your spending habits.

例: I usually spend a small amount of money on shoes because I only buy them when necessary. I prefer not to spend too much on shoes.

提案: Your answer has incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'does not have any effect'. Use complete sentences and explain your preference clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Although many people like fashionable shoes, I prefer comfortable ones. For example, I like sports shoes because they are very comfortable and good for walking.

× It's make me feel comfortable when I'm walking around.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable when I'm walking around.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'It'.

× No, I never bought suit online because the quality of the product was not really good.

✓ No, I have never bought suits online because the quality of the products was not really good.

The present perfect tense 'have never bought' is appropriate for experiences up to now. Also, 'suit' should be plural 'suits' to match the context, and 'product' should be plural 'products' to refer generally.

× When we buy something from online and they does not dispatch the thing, it's same as a photographs.

✓ When we buy something online and they do not dispatch the item, it's the same as the photographs.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online'. 'Does' should be 'do' to agree with plural subject 'they'. 'Thing' is better replaced with 'item' for clarity. 'Same as a photographs' should be 'the same as the photographs' for correct article and plural agreement.

× I usually little amount of money spent on massage because when I need some suit I I usually buy and I don't want to spend lots of money on suits.

✓ I usually spend a little amount of money on shoes because when I need some, I usually buy them and I don't want to spend lots of money on suits.

The sentence structure is incorrect and unclear. 'Little amount of money spent' should be 'spend a little amount of money'. 'Massage' seems to be a typo for 'shoes'. 'Some suit I I usually buy' is corrected to 'some, I usually buy them' for clarity and pronoun use.

× Everybody likes fashionable suits, but I prefer comfortable suits because. I really want sports suit because it is very comfortable and does not have any effect.

✓ Everybody likes fashionable suits, but I prefer comfortable suits because I really want sports suits as they are very comfortable and do not have any negative effects.

The sentence is fragmented and uses 'because' incorrectly at the end of a sentence. It should be combined into one sentence with proper conjunctions. 'Sports suit' should be plural 'sports suits' to match context. 'Does not have any effect' is vague; 'do not have any negative effects' is clearer.