Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应更自然流畅，避免重复表达“benefits and disadvantages”，并且可以简洁明了地说明购买频率。

例: I don't really enjoy buying shoes because it's hard to choose the perfect pair. Therefore, I usually buy shoes only once a year.

提案: 回答中有语法错误（如“have both shoes online”应为“bought shoes online”），建议使用更准确的表达，并且用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because there are often great discounts during festivals like Singles' Day, which makes it very convenient and affordable.

提案: 回答中表达稍显生硬，建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I usually spend around CN¥200 on shoes because I care more about comfort and style than the brand or price.

提案: 回答中“juggling”用词不当，应为“jogging”，并且句子结构可以更简洁，避免重复。

例: Honestly, I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy jogging long distances, so it's important for me to keep my feet comfortable.

× I think every pair of shoes have their own benefits and disadvantages.

✓ I think every pair of shoes has its own benefits and disadvantages.

这里的主语是单数的“every pair”，所以谓语动词应该用单数形式“has”，而不是复数“have”。此外，代词也应与单数主语一致，使用“its”而非“their”。

× I have some difficulty in buying a pair of shoes because I think every pair of shoes have their own benefits and disadvantages.

✓ I have some difficulty buying a pair of shoes because I think every pair of shoes has its own benefits and disadvantages.

动词“have difficulty”后面通常直接接动名词，不需要介词“in”。因此应去掉“in”。

× I have both shoes online because it often offers some attractive discounts, especially some festivals such as single day shopping festival.

✓ I have bought shoes online because it often offers some attractive discounts, especially during festivals such as the Singles' Day shopping festival.

“have both shoes online”表达不正确，应为“have bought shoes online”。此外，“especially some festivals”应改为“especially during festivals”，并且“single day shopping festival”应为“Singles' Day shopping festival”，且前面加定冠词。

× I have both shoes online because it often offers some attractive discounts, especially some festivals such as single day shopping festival.

✓ I have bought shoes online because it often offers some attractive discounts, especially during festivals such as the Singles' Day shopping festival.

这里描述过去经历，应使用现在完成时“have bought”，而不是“have both”。

× I control my price and CN¥200 because I don't value its brand or the expensive price.

✓ I control my price at CN¥200 because I don't value the brand or the expensive price.

“control my price and CN¥200”表达不清，应为“control my price at CN¥200”，表示价格控制在某个数额。

× I control my price and CN¥200 because I don't value its brand or the expensive price.

✓ I control my price at CN¥200 because I don't value the brand or the expensive price.

“its brand”中的“its”指代不明，应直接用“the brand”。

× I buy shoes within my budget.

✓ I buy shoes within my budget.

此句无语法错误，符合习惯用法。

× I really enjoy juggling, especially in long distance, so I would like to make sure my feet are comfortable so that I can run longer.

✓ I really enjoy jogging, especially over long distances, so I would like to make sure my feet are comfortable so that I can run longer.

“juggling”应为“jogging”，表示慢跑；“in long distance”应改为“over long distances”，表示在长距离上。