Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が少し不自然で冗長な部分があります。例えば、「I do like buying shoes I don't buy.」は意味が曖昧で混乱を招きます。より自然で効果的な答えにするために、直接的に頻度と好みを述べ、理由を簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often because they can be quite expensive. I usually prefer shoes in black color because they match most of my outfits.

提案: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、繰り返しがあり、文のつながりがやや不自然です。接続詞を使って文をつなげ、より流暢に話す練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online a few months ago. They were white sandals, and although I was worried about the size, they fit me perfectly, so I was very happy.

提案: 回答が途中で途切れており、意味が不明瞭です。質問に直接答え、金額の説明とその理由を明確に述べることが重要です。文を完結にし、論理的に話す練習をしましょう。

例: I usually spend about 10,000 yen on a pair of shoes, which is quite expensive for me, so I choose carefully before buying.

提案: 理由は伝わりますが、文が繰り返しや冗長な部分があります。接続詞を使い、簡潔で明確な表現を心がけましょう。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because when you walk long distances, uncomfortable shoes can cause injuries to your legs.

× I like to wear shoes which have black colors.

✓ I like to wear shoes which are black.

The phrase 'black colors' is incorrect because 'black' is an adjective describing the color of the shoes, and 'colors' is plural which is unnecessary here. The correct form is 'black' as an adjective without pluralizing 'color'.

× I bought it a few months ago and it was white sandals.

✓ I bought them a few months ago and they were white sandals.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but 'sandals' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' to agree in number. Also, the verb 'was' should be 'were' to agree with the plural subject 'sandals'.

× I usually spend on shoes one ¥10,000 for one pair of shoes, so it is quite expensive for me. So I. I choose.

✓ I usually spend about ¥10,000 on one pair of shoes, so it is quite expensive for me.

The original sentence has awkward word order and incomplete sentence ('So I. I choose.'). The corrected sentence rearranges the words for clarity and removes the incomplete fragment.

× I prefer to choose comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because working long distances you might get hurt when you when you don't wear comfortable shoes and you might injure your your leg.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because when working long distances, you might get hurt if you don't wear comfortable shoes and you might injure your leg.

The phrase 'prefer to choose comfortable shoes than' is incorrect; the correct form is 'prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes'. Also, 'when you when you' is a repetition error, and 'your your leg' repeats 'your'. The sentence is corrected for conjunction use and clarity.