Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question, using correct grammar, and avoiding redundancy. Also, clarify your ideas with linking words to improve coherence.

例: I like buying shoes about once a month because I enjoy having different styles. Usually, I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones, especially when I plan my outfit for various occasions.

提案: Your answer provides good details but could be more structured and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar mistakes. Avoid filler words like 'like' and be more precise in your language.

例: Yes, I bought my dream shoes, Amiri, online last month. They usually cost around $900 before taxes, but I managed to get them for $700 on an online store. That's why I prefer shopping for shoes online.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and unclear. Try to answer directly and avoid unnecessary filler words. Also, clarify your comparison between spending on shoes and clothes with proper sentence structure.

例: I usually spend about $2000 a year on shoes. I tend to spend more money on shoes than on clothes because I value having a good collection of footwear.

提案: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to clearly state your preference and use linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid awkward phrasing and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: It depends on the situation. For work, I prefer comfortable shoes because I have to sit and move around a lot. However, for parties, I choose fashionable shoes to look stylish.

× Basically, I prefer to buy shoes once in a month because I'm fond of different types of shoes.

✓ Basically, I prefer to buy shoes once a month because I'm fond of different types of shoes.

The phrase 'once in a month' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'once a month' to indicate frequency. This is a common singular/plural usage issue where 'a month' is the standard time expression.

× Mostly I prefer the fashionable shoes than the comfortable one because when I have to go to variety I firstly I check which shoes I want to wear.

✓ Mostly I prefer fashionable shoes to comfortable ones because when I have to go to various places, I first check which shoes I want to wear.

There are multiple singular/plural issues: 'the fashionable shoes' should be 'fashionable shoes' without 'the'; 'than the comfortable one' should be 'to comfortable ones' to correctly compare plural items; 'variety' is incorrect here and should be 'various places' or similar. Also, 'firstly I check' is better as 'I first check' for natural word order.

× Yeah, last month I bought my favorite shoe or you can say my dream shoes which is Amiri at the store.

✓ Yeah, last month I bought my favorite shoes, or you can say my dream shoes, which are Amiri, at the store.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match 'dream shoes'. Also, 'which is Amiri' should be 'which are Amiri' because 'shoes' is plural. This is a singular/plural agreement issue.

× The price of that shoes was like 900 something dollars before taxes, but I got like $700.00 at online store.

✓ The price of those shoes was about 900-something dollars before taxes, but I got them for about $700.00 at an online store.

'That shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'those shoes' for plural demonstrative adjective. Also, 'at online store' needs an article 'an' before 'online store'. This is a singular/plural and article usage issue.

× Like if I say I spend usually spend money on the shoes, like annually I spend like $2000 on shoes.

✓ If I say, I usually spend money on shoes; annually, I spend about $2000 on shoes.

The phrase 'the shoes' is incorrect here; it should be just 'shoes' without 'the' because it refers to shoes in general. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and redundant; simplifying improves clarity.

× Mostly I prefer to spend more than shoes rather than the clothes.

✓ Mostly, I prefer to spend more on shoes rather than on clothes.

The phrase 'more than shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'more on shoes'. Also, 'the clothes' should be 'clothes' without 'the' when speaking generally. This is a singular/plural and preposition usage issue.

× If I save, it depends upon the situation.

✓ It depends on the situation if I save.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. Reordering the sentence improves clarity and naturalness. 'Depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more common.

× To sit and I have to go for work then I prefer work comfortable shoes.

✓ If I have to sit and go to work, then I prefer comfortable work shoes.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing conjunctions. Correcting the sentence structure and adjective order clarifies the meaning.

× However, if I have want to go for parties then I prefer fashionable shoes.

✓ However, if I want to go to parties, then I prefer fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'have want' is incorrect; it should be 'want'. Also, 'go for parties' should be 'go to parties'. This is a sentence structure and verb usage issue.