Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a more direct and concise answer to the question. Start with a clear topic sentence about your liking and frequency, then add a brief reason. Avoid redundancy and long, unclear sentences.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them very often. I usually focus more on buying dresses because I believe people notice clothes more than shoes.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by organizing ideas logically and using linking words to connect points smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is more convenient. There are many brands available, and I prefer online shopping over going to malls.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm'. Make your answer more concise and structured by stating your spending habits clearly and giving a reason with linking words.

例: I usually spend less money on shoes compared to clothes or skincare products because I believe one or two pairs are enough for me.

提案: Your answer is good but incomplete at the end. Try to finish your thoughts clearly and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, specify the type of shoes you prefer for each occasion.

例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes depending on the occasion. For daily activities like shopping, I choose comfortable shoes, but for events, I prefer fashionable ones.

× I do not buy shoes much often because I think that people really look at your dress more than your shoes

✓ I do not buy shoes very often because I think that people really look at your dress more than your shoes

The adverb 'much' is incorrectly placed before 'often'. The correct adverb to modify 'often' is 'very'. So, 'much often' should be replaced with 'very often' to sound natural and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I do like buying shoes and but unfortunately I do not buy shoes much often

✓ Yes, I do like buying shoes, but unfortunately I do not buy shoes very often

The conjunctions 'and' and 'but' are incorrectly used together. Only one conjunction is needed here. 'But' is appropriate to show contrast, so 'and' should be removed.

× I usually spend less on shoes as compared to my other stuff like my clothings or skin care things

✓ I usually spend less on shoes as compared to my other stuff like my clothes or skin care products

The word 'clothings' is incorrect because 'clothing' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Also, 'skin care things' is vague; 'skin care products' is more appropriate.

× I think that I spend more on dresses as compared to shoes

✓ I think that I spend more on dresses compared to shoes

The phrase 'as compared to' is wordy and less natural. 'Compared to' is sufficient and more commonly used in this context.

× I think I prefer both, but it truly depends on the occasion

✓ I think I prefer both, but it truly depends on the occasion.

The sentence is missing a period at the end to complete the sentence properly.

× But overall I prefer.

✓ But overall, I prefer both.

The sentence 'But overall I prefer.' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'both' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence. Also, a comma after 'overall' improves readability.