Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks clarity. Try to give a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons or details about how often you buy shoes. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because I like to keep my collection updated. For example, I usually buy new shoes every few months to match different outfits.

提案: Your answer is very short and inappropriate in tone. Always respond politely and provide more information. You can mention your experience with online shopping and your opinion about it.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I find it convenient because I can compare prices and styles easily from home.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Please give a clear amount in your currency and explain if this is per pair or monthly. Avoid irrelevant words like 'lottery'.

例: I usually spend around 170 to 200 dollars on a good pair of shoes because I prefer quality over quantity.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains inappropriate language. Please answer politely and explain your preference with reasons and examples.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk a lot during the day, so comfort is very important to me.

× Probably 170 or even 200 lottery.

✓ Probably 170 or even 200 dollars.

The word 'lottery' is incorrectly used as a quantifier for money. The correct quantifier should be 'dollars' to indicate the amount of money spent on shoes.