Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，避免不必要的细节，保持简洁。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes and I often buy them online. For example, last week I bought a new pair through an online store.

提案: 表达不自然，词汇使用错误（如“confidence”应为“convenient”），句子结构混乱。建议使用正确词汇，清晰表达原因。

例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is very convenient. As a busy university student, shopping online saves me a lot of time.

提案: 语法和词序错误严重，表达不清晰。建议调整句子结构，正确表达花费和原因。

例: I usually spend about 100 dollars on shoes because I am a university student and saving money is very important to me, so I prefer to buy affordable shoes.

提案: 回答不连贯，语法错误多，词汇使用不当（如“confidence”应为“comfort”）。建议简洁明了地表达偏好并给出理由。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I am very active every day as a university student, so comfort is more important to me than fashion.

× Last week I can buy my shoes on VPN with my friends.

✓ Last week I could buy my shoes on VPN with my friends.

这里使用了情态动词can表示过去的能力或可能性，应该用过去式could。

× Yes, I usually buy my shoes online because it is very confidence.

✓ Yes, I usually buy my shoes online because it is very convenient.

confidence是名词，句中需要形容词来描述online购物的特点，应该用convenient。

× I am a university student who is very busy every day so online now.

✓ I am a university student who is very busy every day, so I shop online now.

原句缺少谓语动词，导致句子结构不完整，需要补充动词shop使句子完整。

× I usually spend 100 by my shoes because I am university student, save money is very important for me so I usually cheap shoes my buy.

✓ I usually spend 100 on my shoes because I am a university student. Saving money is very important for me, so I usually buy cheap shoes.

介词用错，应该用spend on；缺少冠词a；句子结构混乱，需调整顺序和标点使句子通顺。

× I usually buy my shoes, it's very comfortable because my major I am a university student so I am a lot of active every day so I need confidence.

✓ I usually buy shoes that are very comfortable because I am a university student and very active every day, so I need comfort.

句子结构混乱，形容词和名词使用错误，confidence用错，应为comfort，且需调整句子顺序使其通顺。