Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Use clear linking words and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'I used to buy shoes when I got my page from the job,' say 'I usually buy shoes when I receive my salary.' Also, avoid repeating ideas like 'more important than having shoes' twice. Keep your answer concise and coherent.

例: I like buying shoes, but not very often. Usually, I buy new shoes when I receive my salary because I prefer to spend money on more important things.

提案: Improve your grammar by using the correct verb forms, such as 'I have bought' instead of 'I do bought.' Also, avoid repeating words like 'enough enough.' Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, for example, 'because' and 'so.'

例: Yes, I have bought shoes several times online because there are not enough stores or malls in my town. So, I prefer shopping online where I can freely choose beautiful styles.

提案: Make your answer more direct and clear. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'like what they said.' Use linking words to explain your reasons logically. Also, correct grammar errors such as 'a shoes' should be 'shoes.'

例: I usually spend less than 1000 pesos on shoes because I prefer to use my money for groceries and other important things.

提案: Use correct comparative forms, for example, 'prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes.' Avoid repetition like 'over over quantity.' Use linking words such as 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, try to be more concise and natural.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable ones because I value quality over quantity. I want to feel comfortable wherever I go, so I always choose comfort first.

× I used to buy shoes when I got my page from the job and I prefer to spend money on things that is more important than having shoes.

✓ I used to buy shoes when I got my pay from the job and I prefer to spend money on things that are more important than having shoes.

The word 'page' is a typo and should be 'pay'. Also, 'things that is' is incorrect because 'things' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue (ID 1). The sentence also mixes past and present tense correctly, so no change needed there.

× Yes I do bought shoes several times online because here in our town it doesn't have enough enough store or malls to shop on.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes several times online because here in our town there aren't enough stores or malls to shop at.

The phrase 'do bought' is incorrect; 'do' is auxiliary for present tense, but 'bought' is past tense. The correct form is 'have bought' for present perfect tense. Also, 'it doesn't have' should be 'there aren't' to refer to plural 'stores or malls'. 'Store' should be plural 'stores'. The preposition 'to shop on' is better as 'to shop at'. These are past tense issue (ID 5), there be issue (ID 3), singular/plural issue (ID 1), and preposition use (ID 11).

× So I prefer buying online and I can freely select beautiful styles.

✓ So I prefer buying online and I can freely select beautiful styles.

No grammatical error found in this sentence related to the problem types listed.

× The money that I usually spend on shoes is that I think it's less than 1000 pesos only because like what they said, I want to spend my money on groceries or the things that is more important than having a shoes.

✓ The money that I usually spend on shoes is less than 1000 pesos because, as they say, I want to spend my money on groceries or things that are more important than having shoes.

The phrase 'is that I think it's' is redundant and awkward; it should be simplified. 'Things that is' should be 'things that are' due to plural agreement. 'Having a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not need 'a'. This involves sentence structure errors (ID 26), singular and plural issue (ID 1), and article errors (ID 22).

× I prefer comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because I am the type of person that is found on choosing quality over over quantity.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because I am the type of person who prefers choosing quality over quantity.

The phrase 'prefer comfortable shoes than' should be 'prefer comfortable shoes to' (incorrect conjunction use, ID 16). 'That is found on choosing' is awkward and incorrect; 'who prefers choosing' is better. Also, 'over over quantity' has a repeated word 'over' which is a typographical error.

× Things like I want to be comfortable around whenever I go.

✓ I want to be comfortable wherever I go.

The phrase 'Things like I want to be comfortable around whenever I go' is awkward and ungrammatical. Simplifying to 'I want to be comfortable wherever I go' improves clarity and correctness. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26).

× That's why I like comfortable shoes.

✓ That's why I like comfortable shoes.

No grammatical error found in this sentence related to the problem types listed.