Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，并且注意时态一致。可以直接回答问题并补充具体原因。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes about twice a week because it helps me relieve stress and makes me happy.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议使用连词连接句子，明确表达购买渠道和原因。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online from websites like Taobao because it is convenient and helps me relax.

提案: 回答中金额表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议明确金额范围，简洁表达购买昂贵鞋子的原因。

例: I usually spend around 500 dollars or several thousand RMB on shoes because expensive shoes make me feel confident and happy at work.

提案: 回答内容不相关且表达混乱，建议直接回答偏好并给出具体理由，避免无关内容。

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because they look good in photos and help me feel confident when I go out.

× Yes, I liked buying shoes about twice a week and I like to buy clothes or filler shoes because I like them very happy.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes about twice a week and I like to buy clothes or filler shoes because they make me very happy.

这里使用了过去时态“liked”，但句子描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“like”。另外，'because I like them very happy'结构不正确，应改为'they make me very happy'，表达鞋子让我感到开心。

× Yes, I liked buying shoes about twice a week and I like to buy clothes or filler shoes because I like them very happy.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes about twice a week and I like to buy clothes or filler shoes because they make me very happy.

句中使用了代词'them'指代鞋子，但后面跟了形容词'happy'，语法不正确。应改为'they make me very happy'，正确表达鞋子带来的感受。

× Yes, I brought shoes online like Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong and I because I like to work or live in health, buy the shoes online can make me happy and relax.

✓ Yes, I buy shoes online from Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong because I like to work or live healthily; buying shoes online can make me happy and relaxed.

句中使用了过去时态'brought'，但描述的是习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时'buy'。另外，句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Yes, I brought shoes online like Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong and I because I like to work or live in health, buy the shoes online can make me happy and relax.

✓ Yes, I buy shoes online from Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong because I like to work or live healthily; buying shoes online can make me happy and relaxed.

'like Tian Mile'中的'like'用法不当，应改为'from'表示购买渠道。

× Yes, I brought shoes online like Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong and I because I like to work or live in health, buy the shoes online can make me happy and relax.

✓ Yes, I buy shoes online from Tian Mile, Taobao or Ding Dong because I like to work or live healthily; buying shoes online can make me happy and relaxed.

'live in health'表达不自然，应改为副词形式'live healthily'。同时，'make me happy and relax'中'relax'应改为形容词'relaxed'。

× $500 or thousands of RMB because I think the expensive shoes can make me confident and when I work the confidence shoes, I will be happy and love it.

✓ 500 or thousands of RMB because I think expensive shoes can make me confident, and when I wear confident shoes at work, I will be happy and love them.

句中'when I work the confidence shoes'表达不正确，应改为'when I wear confident shoes at work'。另外，'love it'应改为'love them'，指代复数鞋子。

× $500 or thousands of RMB because I think the expensive shoes can make me confident and when I work the confidence shoes, I will be happy and love it.

✓ 500 or thousands of RMB because I think expensive shoes can make me confident, and when I wear confident shoes at work, I will be happy and love them.

'love it'中的'it'指代鞋子，鞋子为复数，应使用复数代词'them'。

× Maybe I prefer fashion shoes because I love to take photos with me and I like 2 shoppings in the restaurant.

✓ Maybe I prefer fashionable shoes because I love to take photos of myself and I like shopping twice in the restaurant.

'fashion shoes'应改为形容词形式'fashionable shoes'。'take photos with me'表达错误，应为'take photos of myself'。'2 shoppings'用法不当，应改为'shopping twice'。

× Maybe I prefer fashion shoes because I love to take photos with me and I like 2 shoppings in the restaurant.

✓ Maybe I prefer fashionable shoes because I love to take photos of myself and I like shopping twice in the restaurant.

'take photos with me'中的'with me'用法错误，应改为'take photos of myself'，表示拍自己的照片。

× Maybe I prefer fashion shoes because I love to take photos with me and I like 2 shoppings in the restaurant.

✓ Maybe I prefer fashionable shoes because I love to take photos of myself and I like shopping twice in the restaurant.

'2 shoppings'中'shoppings'不可数，且数字应写为'twice'表示次数。

× It can make me handsome and yeah it can make me beautiful and I love it.

✓ They can make me look handsome and beautiful, and I love them.

鞋子是复数，代词应为'they'和'them'。'make me handsome'表达不自然，改为'make me look handsome'更合适。