Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sua resposta tem algumas falhas de clareza e erros gramaticais que dificultam a compreensão. Tente usar frases mais curtas e claras, e evite palavras irrelevantes como 'fragrance'. Além disso, organize melhor suas ideias para que a resposta seja natural e direta.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them often because they are expensive. Usually, I buy shoes two or three times a year.

提案: Sua resposta está confusa e contém erros gramaticais e de vocabulário que prejudicam a clareza. Procure estruturar a resposta com uma frase principal clara e depois explique suas razões usando palavras corretas e conectores adequados.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I think it is important to check the material, shape, and comfort of the shoes before buying.

提案: Sua resposta é curta e contém repetição ('go out to go out style'). Tente expandir a resposta com mais detalhes e use conectores para melhorar a fluidez.

例: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because fashion trends change quickly, so I prefer to buy affordable shoes.

提案: Sua resposta está confusa e contém erros gramaticais e de vocabulário que dificultam o entendimento. Tente formular uma frase clara explicando sua preferência e dê uma razão específica, usando vocabulário adequado.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because I have big feet and sometimes experience foot pain, so comfort is very important to me.

× I really enjoyed buying shoes but I don't buy them frequently because they are expensive to me so I usually buy them two or three times per year.

✓ I really enjoy buying shoes but I don't buy them frequently because they are expensive to me so I usually buy them two or three times per year.

The sentence mixes past tense 'enjoyed' with present tense 'don't buy' and 'usually buy'. Since the context is about a habitual action, the present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate. Use present tense for habits or general truths.

× This fragrance is less than the I would like.

✓ This frequency is less than I would like.

The word 'fragrance' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is 'frequency'. Also, 'less than the I would like' is ungrammatical; it should be 'less than I would like'. Correct word choice and quantifier usage are necessary.

× No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe when you will buy a new shoes we need to check the material, the shape and the the principal.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I believe when you buy new shoes we need to check the material, the shape, and the principle.

The phrase 'when you will buy' is incorrect; in English, after 'when' we use present tense to refer to future events. Also, 'a new shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural; it should be 'new shoes' without 'a'. 'The principal' is likely a wrong word choice; 'the principle' or 'the price' might be intended.

× The man is the main question is the shoes? Are shoes comfortable?

✓ The main question is: Are the shoes comfortable?

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. It seems to try to say 'The main question is: Are the shoes comfortable?'. Proper sentence structure and punctuation are needed for clarity.

× I usually don't spend much money on shoes because they tend to go out to go out style quite quickly.

✓ I usually don't spend much money on shoes because they tend to go out of style quite quickly.

The phrase 'go out to go out style' is repetitive and incorrect. The correct preposition is 'go out of style'. Avoid repetition and use correct prepositions.

× I definitely prefer comfortable shoes than fashionable shoes because my foot I have big foot and sometimes I have pain on the soil and the this situation. Makes.

✓ I definitely prefer comfortable shoes to fashionable shoes because I have big feet and sometimes I have pain on the sole, and this situation causes discomfort.

The phrase 'prefer comfortable shoes than' is incorrect; the correct conjunction is 'prefer ... to ...'. 'My foot I have big foot' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I have big feet'. 'Pain on the soil' is a wrong word; it should be 'pain on the sole'. The last sentence fragment 'and the this situation. Makes.' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to a complete sentence explaining the cause of discomfort.