Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在重复和语法不准确的问题，表达不够简洁自然。建议减少口头语“you know”，并且注意时态和句子结构，使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I play basketball frequently, which causes my shoes to wear out quickly. Therefore, I usually buy new basketball shoes about once a month.

提案: 回答不完整且有重复，句子未结束，表达不连贯。建议完整表达观点，避免重复口头语，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I have bought all my shoes online because it is very convenient. Moreover, the delivery service is fast and reliable, which makes online shopping a great option for me.

提案: 回答中存在严重语法错误和表达不清，数字和词汇使用混乱。建议明确表达价格范围，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

例: I usually spend between $50 and $100 on a pair of shoes, depending on the style and brand.

提案: 回答未完成且表达重复，缺乏具体细节。建议完整表达观点，减少口头语，增加具体原因和例子。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because their main function is to support my feet during work or daily activities. For example, I often choose sneakers that provide good cushioning and support.

× I need a lot of basketball shoes because it's, you know, always broken very fast as I play vibrant games.

✓ I need a lot of basketball shoes because they, you know, always break very fast as I play vibrant games.

这里的主语是复数 "basketball shoes"，所以谓语动词也应该用复数形式 "break"，而不是单数形式 "is broken"。原句中使用了单数 "it's" 和被动语态 "broken"，不符合主谓一致。建议主语和谓语保持一致，且用主动语态表达动作。

× The frequency I buy, I bought shoes is about, you know, about once a month.

✓ The frequency I buy shoes is about, you know, once a month.

句子中 "I bought shoes" 使用了过去时，但句意是描述习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时 "I buy shoes"。此外，句子结构混乱，去掉多余的 "I bought shoes" 使句子更通顺。

× all my shoes were bought from the online shopping application.

✓ all my shoes were bought on the online shopping application.

英语中通常说 "buy something on an application" 而不是 "from an application"，因为应用是一个平台而非具体地点。这里介词应改为 "on"。

× And it is also convenient to you know, to receive the delivery and you know, it's quite.

✓ And it is also convenient, you know, to receive the delivery, and, you know, it's quite easy.

原句缺少谓语部分，导致句子不完整。需要补充形容词 "easy" 来完成句意。同时，调整逗号位置使句子更流畅。

× As I said before, I bite a lot of shoes, so the price of it depends on its style and I think the prices vary.

✓ As I said before, I buy a lot of shoes, so the price depends on the style and I think the prices vary.

"bite a lot of shoes" 是拼写错误，应为 "buy a lot of shoes"。此外，"the price of it" 改为更自然的 "the price"，避免重复。

× So it's up to about like $1000 to Dylvis, like about 10.

✓ So it’s up to about $100 or so, like about 10 pairs.

原句中 "Dylvis" 可能是误听或拼写错误，且数字表达不清晰。根据上下文推测，价格应为 "$100" 左右，数量 "10" 指鞋的数量，需明确表达。

× So honestly, I like I prefer some comfortable shoes because, you know, shoes were the thing that you wear to work, you know, is fundamental function is to enable you to work.

✓ So honestly, I prefer comfortable shoes because, you know, shoes are the things that you wear to work, and their fundamental function is to enable you to work.

原句中 "I like I prefer" 重复，去掉 "I like"。"shoes were the thing" 主谓不一致，改为 "shoes are the things"。"is fundamental function" 缺少主语，改为 "their fundamental function"。整体调整使句子语法正确且通顺。