Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect naturalness. For example, "I'm not a particularly a big fan" should be "I'm not particularly a big fan". Also, "it can keep my feet get warm" is incorrect; it should be "it keeps my feet warm". Try to use simpler, correct structures and avoid redundancy. Also, linking words like "for example" are used well, but the sentence could be more concise.

例: I'm not particularly a big fan of buying new shoes. I usually buy one or two pairs each year to have suitable footwear for different seasons. For example, I get warmer shoes for winter to keep my feet comfortable.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the use of "Umm" and some informal phrasing reduces the naturalness. Also, the sentence "I tend to look up online first to find my favorite model" could be smoother, for example, "I usually search online first to find my favourite model." Try to avoid filler words and use linking words like "then" more effectively to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times, especially when I need new training or running sneakers. I usually search online first to find my favourite model, then look for websites offering good discounts before making a purchase.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect clarity. For example, "I don't buy new shoes and often" should be "I don't buy new shoes often". Also, "invest on the quality" should be "invest in quality". The sentence "I knew that I can wear them for a quite a good amount of time" is awkward; better to say "I know I can wear them for a long time." Try to use correct prepositions and verb tenses, and keep sentences concise.

例: I don't buy new shoes often, so I prefer to invest in quality. Usually, I spend around €100 or more because I know I can wear the shoes for a long time.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has grammatical mistakes and some awkward phrasing. For example, "a pair of shoes and could keep me from pain" is incorrect; it should be "a pair of shoes that can prevent pain". Also, "a fashionable shoes is are important" is incorrect; it should be "fashionable shoes are important". Try to use correct subject-verb agreement and relative clauses. Also, linking words like "however" are used well, but the answer could be more concise and natural.

例: I always prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot, so shoes that prevent pain are essential for me. However, I think fashionable shoes are important for special occasions like graduation ceremonies or the prom.

× I tend to buy one pair or two pairs of shoes each year to make sure that I have something suitable to wear for different seasons.

✓ I tend to buy one or two pairs of shoes each year to make sure that I have something suitable to wear for different seasons.

The phrase 'one pair or two pairs' is awkward and redundant. It is more natural to say 'one or two pairs' to indicate quantity. This improves the sentence's fluency and clarity.

× In this way, it can keep my feet get warm in winter, for example.

✓ In this way, it can keep my feet warm in winter, for example.

The phrase 'keep my feet get warm' is incorrect because 'keep' should be followed by an adjective or a verb in the -ing form, not 'get'. The correct structure is 'keep my feet warm'.

× Especially when I need to buy new training or running sneakers.

✓ Especially when I need to buy new training or running sneakers,

This sentence is a fragment and lacks connection to the main clause. Adding a comma and connecting it properly improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I tend to invest on the quality more.

✓ I tend to invest more in quality.

The verb 'invest' is followed by the preposition 'in', not 'on'. Also, 'more' should precede 'in quality' for natural word order.

× That's why each time I would spend around €100 or even higher to get a shoes and I knew that I can wear them for a quite a good amount of time.

✓ That's why each time I would spend around €100 or even more to get shoes and I know that I can wear them for quite a good amount of time.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'even higher' is better expressed as 'even more' when referring to money. 'I knew' should be 'I know' to maintain present tense consistency.

× I would always choose comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes since I need to walk a lot, so a pair of shoes and could keep me from pain are very important and essential for me.

✓ I would always choose comfortable shoes over fashionable shoes since I need to walk a lot, so a pair of shoes that could keep me from pain is very important and essential for me.

The phrase 'a pair of shoes and could keep me from pain are' is incorrect. It should be 'a pair of shoes that could keep me from pain is' because 'pair' is singular and requires singular verb 'is'. Also, 'that' introduces the relative clause.

× However, I do think a fashionable shoes is are important in some situations such as graduation ceremony and the prom.

✓ However, I do think fashionable shoes are important in some situations such as a graduation ceremony and the prom.

'A fashionable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot take 'a'. Also, 'is are' is redundant; the correct verb is 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Additionally, 'graduation ceremony' needs an article 'a'.