Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit repetitive and unclear due to repeated phrases and grammatical errors. Try to make your response more concise and clear by avoiding repetition and structuring your sentences properly. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I do it only occasionally. Usually, I buy new shoes when my old ones are damaged and need replacement.

提案: Your answer has some unclear parts and grammatical mistakes. To improve, try to speak clearly and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to explain reasons and results logically.

例: Yes, I recently bought shoes online because my red-tip shoes were torn. I purchased a pair of Puma shoes, which are very comfortable, and I am still using them.

提案: Your answer is informative but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid repetition. Use linking words to compare and explain your preferences.

例: I usually spend between 2000 to 3000 rupees on shoes because this budget offers good quality. I avoid buying shoes below 1000 rupees since, although there are many options, the quality is often poor.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains repeated words and grammatical mistakes. To improve, try to speak more fluently and clearly, avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain your opinion with examples.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones. For example, I once bought fashionable shoes, but they were uncomfortable, so I had to buy another pair that I could wear for a long time.

× Yes, I do like buying shoes, but not but not regular on not on regular basis, but occasionally when there are when there is any problem in my shoes and I that and it's necessary to have a new shoe, then only I buy a new shoes.

✓ Yes, I do like buying shoes, but not regularly or on a regular basis, only occasionally when there is any problem with my shoes and it's necessary to have new shoes, then only I buy new shoes.

The sentence has singular and plural inconsistencies such as 'a new shoe' and 'a new shoes'. 'Shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match the context. Also, 'not but not regular on not on regular basis' is incorrect; it should be 'not regularly or on a regular basis'. Correct plural forms and adverb usage improve clarity.

× Yes, I have bought shoes online recently when my red tip shoes were torn and the O and it is it's become a necessary or to buy a new shoes.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online recently when my red tip shoes were torn and it became necessary to buy new shoes.

The phrase 'a new shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'it's become a necessary or to buy' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'it became necessary to buy'. Correct plural usage and verb tense improve the sentence.

× Then I buy purchased Pumas shoes and that is very good and I am still using them.

✓ Then I purchased Pumas shoes, and they are very good, and I am still using them.

The phrase 'I buy purchased' is incorrect; only one past tense verb 'purchased' is needed. Also, 'that is very good' should be 'they are very good' to refer to 'shoes' plural. Correct past tense and pronoun agreement improve clarity.

× I usually have a budget of 2000 to 3000. I think it is the best budget in which you can have a good quality shoes.

✓ I usually have a budget of 2000 to 3000. I think it is the best budget in which you can have good quality shoes.

The phrase 'a good quality shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Removing 'a' before 'good quality shoes' corrects the plural usage.

× Apart from that, I don't prefer buying a shoes below 1000 because you can buy, you can have very many variety in them but the quality is not you want in the in under in that.

✓ Apart from that, I don't prefer buying shoes below 1000 because you can have a wide variety, but the quality is not what you want under that price.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and should not have 'a'. Also, 'very many variety' is incorrect; 'a wide variety' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct plural and quantifier usage.

× Apart from that, I don't prefer buying a shoes below 1000 because you can buy, you can have very many variety in them but the quality is not you want in the in under in that.

✓ Apart from that, I don't prefer buying shoes below 1000 because you can have a wide variety, but the quality is not what you want under that price.

The phrase 'in them' is incorrect when referring to variety of shoes; 'a wide variety' is better. Also, 'in the in under in that' is incorrect preposition usage; 'under that price' is correct. Proper preposition use improves sentence clarity.

× Actually, I personally I don't prefer fashionable shoes. Shoes need to be comfortable for for my for me, I I have once I have purchased fashionable shoes, but they were not very comfortable, so I need to buy a purchase.

✓ Actually, I personally don't prefer fashionable shoes. Shoes need to be comfortable for me. I once purchased fashionable shoes, but they were not very comfortable, so I needed to buy a new pair.

The sentence has redundant pronouns and words like 'for for my for me' and 'I I'. Also, 'I need to buy a purchase' is incorrect; it should be 'I needed to buy a new pair'. Correct pronoun use and verb tense improve clarity.

× So I need to purchase the new one so that I can be comfortable in that and wear them for a long period.

✓ So I needed to purchase a new pair so that I could be comfortable in them and wear them for a long period.

'The new one' is singular but 'wear them' is plural; to maintain consistency, 'a new pair' and 'them' should be used. Also, verb tense adjusted to past to match context. Correct singular/plural agreement and verb tense improve sentence.