Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cavabınızda gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeler var. Daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için cümlelerinizi sadeleştirin ve doğrudan soruya odaklanın. Ayrıca, cümle yapısını geliştirerek daha etkili bir yanıt verebilirsiniz.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase one pair each month because my old ones get worn out.

提案: Cümlenizde bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve kelime seçimi sorunları var. Daha doğru ve doğal ifadeler kullanarak yanıtınızı geliştirebilirsiniz. Ayrıca, bağlaçlarla cümlelerinizi daha akıcı hale getirin.

例: Yes, I buy all my shoes online because it's very easy to find different kinds, so I shop this way every time.

提案: Cümlelerinizde dilbilgisi hataları var ve bazı ifadeler tekrarlanmış. Daha doğru gramer kullanımı ve daha akıcı cümlelerle yanıtınızı geliştirebilirsiniz.

例: It depends on the type of shoes. For special occasions like weddings or parties, I spend around $200, but for everyday use, I usually spend about $15.

提案: Cevabınızda dolgu kelimeler ve tekrarlar var. Daha net ve akıcı cümleler kurarak, bağlaçlar kullanarak düşüncelerinizi daha iyi ifade edebilirsiniz.

例: That's a difficult question. For parties or restaurants, I prefer fashionable shoes, but for going to the park or work, comfortable shoes are definitely better.

× I buy shoes, uh, one at a time, a month because it gets uh, dirty and it gets uh, old.

✓ I buy shoes, uh, one at a time, a month because they get, uh, dirty and they get, uh, old.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should agree in number. 'It' is singular and incorrect here; 'they' should be used to refer to plural 'shoes'. Also, 'gets' should be 'get' to match plural subject.

× Yes, actually I do all my shopping online because its very easy to find every kinds of shoes so I do it every time.

✓ Yes, actually I do all my shopping online because it's very easy to find every kind of shoe so I do it every time.

The contraction 'its' should be 'it's' (it is). 'Every kinds' is incorrect; 'every' is used with singular countable nouns, so 'kind' should be singular. Also, 'shoes' should be singular 'shoe' to match 'every kind'.

× I think it's depend on which shoe I wanna buy.

✓ I think it depends on which shoe I wanna buy.

The verb 'depend' should be in third person singular present tense 'depends' to agree with the subject 'it'.

× If I wanna buy a shoe for my wedding or for for party I spend $200.00 but if I buy it for my daily life I spend $15.00 for it.

✓ If I wanna buy a shoe for my wedding or for a party, I spend $200.00 but if I buy it for my daily life, I spend $15.00 on it.

The phrase 'for for party' has a repeated preposition and missing article; it should be 'for a party'. Also, 'spend $15.00 for it' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to spending money on something.

× Umm is very arguing question.

✓ Umm, it is a very difficult question.

The sentence lacks a subject pronoun 'it'. 'Arguing' is incorrect adjective here; 'difficult' or 'challenging' fits better. Also, an article 'a' is needed before 'very difficult question'.

× If I wanna go to a party or if I wanna go to restaurant, I think fashionable shoes are a better choice.

✓ If I wanna go to a party or if I wanna go to a restaurant, I think fashionable shoes are a better choice.

The noun 'restaurant' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× But umm, if I go to park, if I go to work, I think comfortable shoes are just better and and they're good too.

✓ But umm, if I go to the park, if I go to work, I think comfortable shoes are just better and they're good too.

The noun 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place like 'the park'. 'Work' as a place does not require an article.