Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如"he will make me happy"应为"they make me happy"。建议注意主谓一致和代词使用，避免表达不清。回答内容应更自然简洁，避免重复。

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because they make me feel happy and relaxed. I usually buy high heels or ballet shoes since they help me dance better and enhance my appearance.

提案: 回答较为完整，但表达略显口语化且有些重复。建议使用更正式和连贯的表达，避免重复“buy”。

例: Yes, I often purchase shoes online because I know my size well. It is more convenient and usually cheaper since I can use discounts, which saves me money compared to shopping in physical stores.

提案: 回答中表达不够简洁，句子结构重复且有语法错误。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，避免冗长。

例: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer to save. I only buy shoes that I really need and are suitable for me, as I think money should be used wisely.

提案: 回答内容明确，但句子结构重复且有语法错误，如"a comfortable shoes"应为"comfortable shoes"。建议注意冠词使用和句子多样性。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk, run, and exercise. Comfortable shoes are essential for these activities and for shopping with friends, so I always choose them over fashionable ones.

× I always buy some high heels or some ballet shoes because it can help me to dance and to perform my appearance.

✓ I always buy some high heels or some ballet shoes because they can help me dance and perform better.

这里的主语是复数（high heels 和 ballet shoes），所以谓语动词应使用复数形式“they can”。另外，“help me to dance and to perform my appearance”表达不自然，改为“help me dance and perform better”更符合英语习惯。

× But if you buy in the Internet you can use a discount and that is convenient for people to buy new shoes.

✓ But if you buy on the Internet, you can use a discount and that is convenient for people to buy new shoes.

英语中表示在网上购物应使用介词“on”，而不是“in”。因此应改为“buy on the Internet”。

× I always buy shoes online because I know my size and I don't want to go outside to buy something because it's expensive.

✓ I always buy shoes online because I know my size and I don't want to go outside to buy anything because it's expensive.

这里的“something”用法不当，否定句中应使用“anything”，表示否定含义。

× I would say I would not spend a lot of money to buy shoes because I want to save money and I think I will buy some suitable shoes and all I need, but I will not buy something that I don't need to do because money is important.

✓ I would say I would not spend a lot of money to buy shoes because I want to save money and I think I will buy some suitable shoes and all I need, but I will not buy anything that I don't need because money is important.

否定句中“something”应改为“anything”，以符合英语否定句的用法。

× Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I always walk and run and I need to do some exercise or shopping with my friends and that is important to need a comfortable shoes to go for walk.

✓ Actually I prefer comfortable shoes because I always walk and run and I need to do some exercise or shopping with my friends and that is why I need comfortable shoes to go for a walk.

“a comfortable shoes”中“shoes”是复数，前面不应加不定冠词“a”，应改为“comfortable shoes”。另外，“go for walk”缺少冠词，应为“go for a walk”。