Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear time references and avoid redundancy. For example, say how often you buy shoes and express your liking naturally.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase a new pair every three months.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains a small mistake ('both' instead of 'bought') and could be more natural. Use linking words to explain why you buy shoes online.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because I don't have enough time to shop in physical stores.

提案: Your answer is a bit awkward and could be clearer. Use simpler and more natural phrasing to state the amount you spend, and avoid unnecessary words.

例: I usually spend about 100 dollars on a pair of shoes.

提案: Your answer is good but could be more concise and fluent. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid repeating words.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I have three children, and it's hard to manage them when I'm out. However, when I was single, I used to choose fashionable shoes.

× I think I often buy shoes is around just was Perth three months.

✓ I think I often buy shoes about every three months.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unnecessary words, making it unclear. The phrase 'is around just was Perth three months' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The corrected sentence uses a clear and proper structure to express frequency, which is 'about every three months'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I have both shoes online because I don't have enough time to go and buy shoes offline.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online because I don't have enough time to go and buy shoes offline.

The verb 'both' is incorrect here; the correct past participle form of 'buy' is 'bought'. The sentence requires the present perfect tense 'have bought' to indicate an action completed at an unspecified time before now. Using 'both' is a mistake likely due to confusion with 'bought'.

× Actually approximately I just spend money on buying shoes around 100 for a pair.

✓ Actually, I usually spend around 100 dollars on a pair of shoes.

The original sentence has awkward word order and missing articles, making it unclear. 'Actually approximately I just spend money on buying shoes around 100 for a pair' is not grammatically correct. The corrected sentence uses proper adverb placement and includes the article 'a' before 'pair' to improve clarity and correctness.

× I just prefer to have comfortable shoes because I have three children.

✓ I prefer to have comfortable shoes because I have three children.

The use of 'just' here is unnecessary and can be omitted for smoother, more natural English. The verb 'prefer' is correctly in the present tense to express a current preference. Removing 'just' improves the sentence's clarity and flow.

× But when I was single at the time, I just I just chose the fashionable ones.

✓ But when I was single, I chose the fashionable ones.

The phrase 'I just I just chose' contains a repeated phrase which is an error. Removing the duplicate 'I just' corrects the sentence. The past tense 'chose' is appropriate here to describe a past action. Also, 'at the time' is redundant after 'when I was single' and can be omitted for conciseness.