Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够清晰，句子结构混乱，表达不自然。建议直接回答问题，使用简单明了的句子，并且注意时态和词汇的准确使用。可以先说明喜欢买鞋，然后说明频率，避免冗余和语法错误。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. A few years ago, I used to buy new shoes every month, but now I only buy shoes about twice a year.

提案: 回答中有明显的发音和用词错误，句子不通顺。建议使用简单句子直接回答问题，并说明原因或经历。避免使用错误的词汇，保持语言自然流畅。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I prefer online shopping because it is more convenient than going to the market.

提案: 回答中表达不清楚，句子结构混乱，词汇使用不准确。建议先直接回答问题，然后用具体数字和例子支持，避免使用模糊和错误的表达。

例: It depends on the type of shoes. For basketball shoes, I usually spend about 200 U.S. dollars. For regular shoes, I spend around 50 dollars.

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构和用词有误。建议先明确表达自己的偏好，然后用具体原因支持，使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: I prefer comfortable shoes rather than fashionable ones because fashionable shoes often do not fit well. Also, I usually don't attend parties, so comfort is more important to me.

× Yes, I love my favorite actually I am OK for the sneaker switch several years ago and then I used to buy shoes maybe every month, but now I buy anything every half year.

✓ Yes, I love my favorite sneakers. Actually, I switched to sneakers several years ago, and then I used to buy shoes maybe every month, but now I buy shoes only every half year.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, causing confusion. Breaking it into clearer sentences and adding missing words improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Actually, I bite. I miss shoes online and I say I don't go to the market to buy shoes.

✓ Actually, I buy. I buy shoes online and I don't go to the market to buy shoes.

The word 'bite' is a wrong word choice for 'buy'. Also, 'I miss shoes online' is incorrect; it should be 'I buy shoes online'. The pronoun usage is incorrect and the verbs are misused.

× It depends on what kind of sales I bought. When I buy basketball shoes, I tend to spend, you know, 200 U.S. dollars in that. But when I buy just normal shoes, I tend to buy a few. Maybe I'm through walking through U.S. dollar.

✓ It depends on what kind of shoes I buy. When I buy basketball shoes, I tend to spend about 200 U.S. dollars. But when I buy just normal shoes, I tend to spend less, maybe thirty U.S. dollars.

The original sentence misuses quantifiers and contains unclear phrases like 'I tend to buy a few' and 'I'm through walking through U.S. dollar'. Correct quantifiers and clearer expressions are needed to convey the intended meaning.

× So I myself actually like don't choose more because you know, fashionable shoes, they don't exist to fit well.

✓ So I actually don't choose fashionable shoes because, you know, fashionable shoes don't tend to fit well.

The phrase 'I myself actually like don't choose more' is incorrect in pronoun and word order. Also, 'they don't exist to fit well' is incorrect; it should be 'they don't tend to fit well'.

× So it doesn't feel better. And most of the time we don't go out to party or something. So if we're comfortable.

✓ So they don't feel comfortable. And most of the time, we don't go out to parties or anything, so comfort is more important.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'So it doesn't feel better' lacks a clear subject. The sentence 'So if we're comfortable' is incomplete. Rewriting for clarity and completeness improves understanding.