Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it contains a minor error ('fats' instead of 'flats') and some redundancy. Try to avoid listing too many details without linking them smoothly. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because I consider myself a fashion enthusiast. I usually buy shoes almost every month, and I own about 48 pairs in various colors. For example, I like high heels, sneakers, and flats, which I often order from online sites like Amazon.

提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and somewhat repetitive. The last sentence is unfinished and unclear. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online from sites like Amazon and Gigi because it's very convenient. For instance, I can order from the comfort of my home and have the shoes delivered quickly. Moreover, online shopping allows me to compare different styles and prices easily.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides specific details, but the structure can be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid starting multiple sentences with 'but'.

例: It depends on the shoes. Usually, I spend at least £100 on a pair, but depending on the size and brand, I can spend as little as £20. For example, my most expensive pair cost £500.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but the sentence structure can be improved for better fluency. Use linking words to contrast your preferences more naturally and avoid awkward phrasing like 'I tend to move more to wearing'.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I spend a lot of time on my feet during daily activities. However, on special occasions, I choose to wear fashionable shoes to look more stylish.

× I own 48 pairs of shoes and I have them in variety of colors.

✓ I own 48 pairs of shoes and I have them in a variety of colors.

The phrase 'variety of colors' requires the indefinite article 'a' before 'variety' because 'variety' is a singular noun here. Omitting 'a' is incorrect in this context.

× I love high heels, sneakers and fats.

✓ I love high heels, sneakers and flats.

The word 'fats' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'flats', which refers to flat shoes. This is a vocabulary error but also affects plural form correctness.

× I love to order shoes from sites like Amazon.

✓ I love ordering shoes from sites like Amazon.

After the verb 'love', the gerund form (-ing) is more natural and commonly used than the infinitive 'to order' when expressing general preferences.

× I love to order shoes online because I get to see.

✓ I love ordering shoes online because I get to see them.

The sentence is incomplete and missing the object after 'see'. Adding 'them' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'love ordering' is more natural than 'love to order' as explained before.

× But my most expensive shoe cost £500.

✓ But my most expensive shoes cost £500.

Since the context is about shoes in general and the price likely refers to a pair, 'shoes' (plural) is appropriate. Also, 'cost' agrees with plural subject 'shoes'.

× I tend to move more to wearing comfortable shoes.

✓ I tend to move more towards wearing comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'move more to wearing' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'towards' and the gerund 'wearing' is appropriate after 'move towards'.

× But on occasions like special events I wear fashion shoes.

✓ But on occasions like special events, I wear fashionable shoes.

The adjective 'fashion' is incorrect here; the correct adjective form is 'fashionable' to describe shoes. Also, a comma after the introductory phrase improves clarity.