Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，避免重复。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I used to shop with my friends often, but now as a student, I buy shoes about every two months because of limited time and budget.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但语法和表达不够准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，注意时态和单复数，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online when I don't have time to visit the mall. Once, the seller sent me the wrong size, but she apologized and quickly sent the correct pair along with a small gift.

提案: 回答中时态混乱，表达不够连贯。建议分清过去和现在，使用连接词，表达更具体的金额和原因。

例: When I was a child, my parents spent about 400 to 500 yuan on my shoes. However, now as a student looking for a job, I usually buy cheaper shoes because I have a limited budget.

提案: 回答较完整，但有语法错误和用词不当。建议注意时态一致，使用正确的词汇，并用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: It depends on the situation. When I go shopping with my friends, I prefer fashionable shoes because we can take photos and enjoy the mall. However, when I go hiking or climb mountains, I always choose comfortable shoes that protect my feet and make walking easier.

× Yeah, the girl like the beautiful shoes and clothes.

✓ Yeah, the girl likes the beautiful shoes and clothes.

主语是单数第三人称（the girl），谓语动词应加-s，表示第三人称单数。

× The before, I usually go shopping with my friend to buy the shoes, but now I am a student to pacify the world, I don't have too much time and money to shopping, but now I usually buy the shoes two months.

✓ Before, I usually went shopping with my friend to buy shoes, but now I am a student trying to support myself, so I don't have much time and money to go shopping. Now I usually buy shoes every two months.

1. 'The before' 应为 'Before'，不需要冠词。2. 'to shopping' 应为 'to go shopping'，动词不定式后需用动词原形。3. 句子结构混乱，时态不一致，需调整。4. 'buy the shoes two months' 应为 'buy shoes every two months'，表达频率。

× Before, I usually go shopping with my friend to buy the shoes, but now I am a student to pacify the world, I don't have too much time and money to shopping, but now I usually buy the shoes two months.

✓ Before, I usually went shopping with my friend to buy shoes, but now I am a student trying to support myself, so I don't have much time and money to go shopping. Now I usually buy shoes every two months.

描述过去的习惯动作，动词应使用过去式 'went'。

× One time although the merchants send the wrong size shoes for me, but after that she set the right side for me and say sorry to me and send some little good person for.

✓ One time, although the merchant sent the wrong size shoes to me, after that she sent the right size for me, apologized to me, and sent some small gifts.

1. 'send' 应用过去式 'sent'。2. 'for me' 应为 'to me'，介词用法错误。3. 'set the right side' 应为 'sent the right size'，单词拼写错误。4. 'say sorry' 应为 'apologized'，时态和表达更自然。5. 'send some little good person for' 语义不清，推测为 'sent some small gifts'。

× One time although the merchants send the wrong size shoes for me, but after that she set the right side for me and say sorry to me and send some little good person for.

✓ One time, although the merchant sent the wrong size shoes to me, after that she sent the right size for me, apologized to me, and sent some small gifts.

描述过去发生的事情，动词应使用过去式。

× And on shoes, when I was a children my parents always bought me beautiful and fun shoes and they sometimes spend around 400 or CN¥500 on it.

✓ And about shoes, when I was a child, my parents always bought me beautiful and fun shoes and they sometimes spent around 400 or CN¥500 on them.

1. 'a children' 应为 'a child'，children 是复数。2. 'spend' 应用过去式 'spent'，与过去时间状语一致。3. 'on it' 应为 'on them'，指代复数鞋子。

× And on shoes, when I was a children my parents always bought me beautiful and fun shoes and they sometimes spend around 400 or CN¥500 on it.

✓ And about shoes, when I was a child, my parents always bought me beautiful and fun shoes and they sometimes spent around 400 or CN¥500 on them.

描述过去的习惯动作，动词应使用过去式。

× But now I am a student looking for a job, I don't have too much money spent on it so I usually buy some cheaper.

✓ But now I am a student looking for a job, I don't have much money to spend on it, so I usually buy some cheaper shoes.

1. 'too much money spent on it' 结构不正确，应为 'money to spend on it'。2. 'buy some cheaper' 不完整，应补充名词 'shoes'。

× But now I am a student looking for a job, I don't have too much money spent on it so I usually buy some cheaper.

✓ But now I am a student looking for a job, I don't have much money to spend on it, so I usually buy some cheaper shoes.

'money spent on it' 结构不当，正确表达应为 'money to spend on it'，表示用途。

× It depends on situation.

✓ It depends on the situation.

'situation' 前应加定冠词 'the'，表示特定情况。

× When I go shopping with my friend, I prefer reading fashionable shoes because we can take photos and go shopping the mall.

✓ When I go shopping with my friend, I prefer wearing fashionable shoes because we can take photos and go shopping in the mall.

1. 'prefer reading fashionable shoes' 应为 'prefer wearing fashionable shoes'，动词搭配错误。2. 'go shopping the mall' 应为 'go shopping in the mall'，缺少介词。

× When I go shopping with my friend, I prefer reading fashionable shoes because we can take photos and go shopping the mall.

✓ When I go shopping with my friend, I prefer wearing fashionable shoes because we can take photos and go shopping in the mall.

'go shopping the mall' 缺少介词 'in'，正确表达为 'go shopping in the mall'。

× However, when I was go hiking or climb the mountains, I always choose the comfortable shoes my my feet and make walking easier.

✓ However, when I went hiking or climbed the mountains, I always chose comfortable shoes for my feet to make walking easier.

1. 'was go' 应为过去式 'went'。2. 'climb' 应用过去式 'climbed'。3. 'choose' 应用过去式 'chose'。4. 'my my feet' 重复，应为 'for my feet'。5. 句子结构调整使表达更清晰。

× However, when I was go hiking or climb the mountains, I always choose the comfortable shoes my my feet and make walking easier.

✓ However, when I went hiking or climbed the mountains, I always chose comfortable shoes for my feet to make walking easier.

'comfortable shoes my my feet' 缺少介词，应为 'comfortable shoes for my feet'。