Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác (ví dụ: 'shoes' thay vì 'sole'), tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, đồng thời trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually purchase them once or twice a year, especially when I return to school or go on holiday. I prefer quality over quantity, so I tend to choose durable shoes that last longer.

提案: Bạn cần tránh lặp từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sắp xếp ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn. Sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because it is easy to browse many brands and styles. Recently, I purchased a new pair of sneakers online, and I like reading reviews before making a decision.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp nghiêm trọng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sử dụng cấu trúc câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng chính xác. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và nói rõ số tiền bạn chi tiêu cùng lý do.

例: I usually spend about 2,000,000 VND on shoes because I prefer quality over quantity. I believe investing in good shoes is more worthwhile.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như từ vựng không chính xác ('souls' thay vì 'shoes'). Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ vựng phù hợp, đồng thời dùng liên từ để kết nối ý tưởng.

例: I like both fashionable and comfortable shoes, but it depends on the occasion. Fashionable shoes are suitable for parties or holidays, while comfortable shoes are better for daily activities or long walks.

× Yes, I like buying sole and often buy it one or twice a year when I come back to school or when I go on date holiday.

✓ Yes, I like buying soles and often buy them once or twice a year when I come back to school or when I go on a date holiday.

The word 'sole' should be plural 'soles' because it refers to multiple shoes. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'soles'. 'One or twice' should be 'once or twice' for correct expression of frequency. 'On date holiday' should be 'on a date holiday' to include the article 'a' before the noun phrase.

× Yes, I like buying sole and often buy it one or twice a year when I come back to school or when I go on date holiday.

✓ Yes, I like buying soles and often buy them once or twice a year when I come back to school or when I go on a date holiday.

The phrase 'go on date holiday' is missing the article 'a' before 'date holiday'. The correct preposition usage is 'go on a date holiday'.

× I prefer quality than quantity so I tend to choose durable shoes.

✓ I prefer quality to quantity so I tend to choose durable shoes.

The correct expression is 'prefer A to B', not 'prefer A than B'. 'Than' is used in comparisons, but 'prefer' requires 'to'.

× So recently I have bought I have purchased a new pair of sneaker online and I also like reading reviews.

✓ So recently I have bought a new pair of sneakers online and I also like reading reviews.

The phrase 'I have bought I have purchased' is redundant; only one is needed. Also, 'sneaker' should be plural 'sneakers' because it refers to a pair. The present perfect tense 'have bought' is appropriate here.

× Make me fall.

✓ They make me fall for them.

The sentence 'Make me fall.' is incomplete and unclear. It lacks a subject and object. Adding 'They' as subject and 'for them' clarifies the meaning.

× I often purchase for once around 2,000,000 because I prevent a quality than quantity.

✓ I often purchase once for around 2,000,000 because I prefer quality to quantity.

The phrase 'purchase for once' is incorrect; it should be 'purchase once'. 'Prevent' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'prefer'. Also, 'prefer A to B' is the correct structure, not 'prefer A than B'.

× I often purchase for once around 2,000,000 because I prevent a quality than quantity.

✓ I often purchase once for around 2,000,000 because I prefer quality to quantity.

The article 'a' before 'quality' is unnecessary because 'quality' is an uncountable noun here.

× I like both but I believe that is depends on students.

✓ I like both but I believe that it depends on students.

The pronoun 'that' should be followed by 'it' as the subject of the verb 'depends'. 'That is depends' is incorrect; it should be 'that it depends'.

× Fashionable souls need to be work when you go on a hot but go go party, go on a holiday and comfortable shoes needs to be worn when you go.

✓ Fashionable shoes need to be worn when you go to a party, go on a holiday, and comfortable shoes need to be worn when you go out.

'Souls' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes'. 'Need to be work' should be 'need to be worn'. 'Go on a hot but go go party' is unclear and corrected to 'go to a party'. 'Comfortable shoes needs' should be 'comfortable shoes need' to agree in number.