Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'different type of shoes' and incorrect plural forms such as '50 pair of shoes'. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes because I collect various types. Currently, I own about 50 pairs.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: No, I prefer buying shoes in shops or malls because I enjoy the experience of trying them on before purchasing.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is too long. Use simpler sentences and correct prepositions. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

例: I usually spend about £50 each month on shoes because my parents allow me to. I buy them regularly since shoes are essential and reflect my personality.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting plural forms and sentence structure. Use linking words to contrast your preferences clearly.

例: I prefer both types of shoes because they serve different purposes. For sports, I choose comfortable shoes, whereas for special occasions, I wear fashionable ones.

× I like to buy shoes because I have a hobby of collecting different type of shoes and now I have 50 pair of shoes.

✓ I like to buy shoes because I have a hobby of collecting different types of shoes and now I have 50 pairs of shoes.

The word 'type' should be plural 'types' because it refers to more than one kind of shoes. Similarly, 'pair' should be plural 'pairs' because it refers to multiple pairs of shoes. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× No, I don't prefer to brought shoes from online because I like to go at a particular shop or mall for buying shoes because it is a good experience for me when I go at any particular place to buy shoes.

✓ No, I don't prefer to buy shoes online because I like to go to a particular shop or mall for buying shoes because it is a good experience for me when I go to any particular place to buy shoes.

The verb 'brought' is the past tense of 'bring' and is incorrectly used after 'prefer to'. The correct form is the base verb 'buy'. Also, 'go at' should be 'go to' as the correct preposition for movement towards a place. This addresses past tense and preposition usage errors.

× No, I don't prefer to brought shoes from online because I like to go at a particular shop or mall for buying shoes because it is a good experience for me when I go at any particular place to buy shoes.

✓ No, I don't prefer to buy shoes online because I like to go to a particular shop or mall for buying shoes because it is a good experience for me when I go to any particular place to buy shoes.

The preposition 'at' is incorrectly used with 'go'. The correct preposition is 'to' when indicating movement towards a place.

× I spend £50 off every month on buying shoes because my parents allowed to me purchase shoes on every month because shoes is that type of thing which is used on daily basis and also it suits on my personality then I prefer to buy shoes on every month.

✓ I spend £50 off every month on buying shoes because my parents allow me to purchase shoes every month because shoes are the type of thing which is used on a daily basis and also suit my personality, so I prefer to buy shoes every month.

Several preposition errors: 'allowed to me' should be 'allow me'; 'on every month' should be 'every month'; 'shoes is' should be 'shoes are' (plural agreement); 'used on daily basis' should be 'used on a daily basis'; 'suits on my personality' should be 'suit my personality'. These are issues of preposition use and subject-verb agreement.

× I spend £50 off every month on buying shoes because my parents allowed to me purchase shoes on every month because shoes is that type of thing which is used on daily basis and also it suits on my personality then I prefer to buy shoes on every month.

✓ I spend £50 off every month on buying shoes because my parents allow me to purchase shoes every month because shoes are the type of thing which is used on a daily basis and also suit my personality, so I prefer to buy shoes every month.

The verb 'allowed' should be 'allow' to agree with the plural subject 'parents'. Also, 'shoes is' should be 'shoes are' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. 'Suits' should be 'suit' to agree with plural subject 'shoes'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue.

× I prefer both type of shoes because both type of shoes play an indispensable role in my life.

✓ I prefer both types of shoes because both types of shoes play an indispensable role in my life.

The phrase 'both type' is incorrect because 'both' refers to two items and should be followed by the plural noun 'types'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue.

× I prefer to wear fashionable shoes if I go to and any special occasion.

✓ I prefer to wear fashionable shoes if I go to any special occasion.

The phrase 'go to and any special occasion' contains an unnecessary conjunction 'and'. Removing 'and' corrects the sentence. This is an incorrect conjunction usage issue.