Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say how often you buy shoes, then explain the occasions and types you prefer.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually buy them twice a month. However, it depends on occasions; for example, I buy shoes for traditional events or weddings. I prefer both fancy and casual shoes depending on the event.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Try to explain why you prefer buying shoes in the market with specific reasons and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I prefer shopping in the market because shoe sizes can be tricky. If the size is wrong, the shoes may not fit well and cause discomfort.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your spending habits with clear reasons and linking words. Avoid grammatical mistakes and redundancy.

例: I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I buy them twice a month. Therefore, I prefer to buy affordable shoes rather than expensive ones.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information. Focus on directly answering the question with a topic sentence, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid unrelated sentences and complete your thoughts.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes for daily use because they are suitable for my routine activities. However, for special events or functions, I choose fashionable shoes to look stylish.

× Yes, I like buying shoes most of the time I buy shoes twice a month but it depends both occasional occasions.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes. Most of the time, I buy shoes twice a month, but it depends on occasional occasions.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and the phrase 'both occasional occasions' is incorrect. 'Occasional occasions' is redundant and 'both' is unnecessary here. Adding punctuation improves clarity and removing 'both' and correcting the phrase makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× If some occasions like our traditional locations or something wedding then I buy shoes.

✓ If there are some occasions like our traditional functions or weddings, then I buy shoes.

The phrase 'some occasions like our traditional locations or something wedding' is incorrect. 'Locations' should be 'functions' or 'events', and 'something wedding' should be 'weddings'. Also, 'If some occasions' needs 'there are' to be grammatically correct.

× I prefer both kind of shoes like fancy shoes as well as.

✓ I prefer both kinds of shoes, like fancy shoes as well.

The phrase 'both kind of shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'both kinds of shoes' because 'both' refers to two plural items. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed proper ending.

× Yes I have bought shoes online but I prefer to go to market to buy shoes because shoes are some kind of tricky shopping because it depends upon the size if you buy some wrong size so it may be it misfit but it gives you discomfort.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I prefer to go to the market to buy shoes because shoe shopping is tricky; it depends on the size. If you buy the wrong size, it may misfit and cause discomfort.

The sentence was long and lacked punctuation. 'Go to market' should be 'go to the market'. 'Shoes are some kind of tricky shopping' is incorrect; it should be 'shoe shopping is tricky'. 'If you buy some wrong size' should be 'if you buy the wrong size'. 'It may be it misfit' is incorrect; 'it may misfit' is correct.

× I don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I bought shoes 2 twice a month, so I don't prefer to spend a lot of money on a specific one item.

✓ I don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I buy shoes twice a month, so I don't prefer to spend a lot of money on a specific item.

The phrase 'I bought shoes 2 twice a month' is incorrect; it should be 'I buy shoes twice a month' to match the present tense context. 'A specific one item' is redundant; 'a specific item' is correct.

× So I spent not too much money on shoes.

✓ So I don't spend too much money on shoes.

The sentence uses past tense 'spent' which conflicts with the present tense context. Also, 'not too much money' is awkward; 'don't spend too much money' is clearer and grammatically correct.

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✓ This sentence is unrelated and should be removed as it does not answer the question.

The sentence does not relate to the question about shoes and seems out of context, so it should be omitted.

× Preferred comfortable shoes because daily routine.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because of my daily routine.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper verb form. 'Preferred' should be 'I prefer'. 'Because daily routine' is incomplete; it should be 'because of my daily routine'.

× When we go outside we wear comfortable shoes.

✓ When we go outside, we wear comfortable shoes.

Adding a comma after 'outside' improves readability. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× So I prefer most of the time to buy a comfortable shoes but when I want to go some kind of function or events, so I wear.

✓ So I prefer most of the time to buy comfortable shoes, but when I want to go to some kind of function or event, I wear fancy shoes.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'comfortable shoes' without 'a' because 'shoes' is plural. 'Go some kind of function or events' should be 'go to some kind of function or event'. The sentence was incomplete and needed completion for clarity.