Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, specify how often you buy shoes using natural expressions.

例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes because I like collecting different brands. I usually buy new shoes every three months.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific details about your experience. Also, correct grammar and vocabulary usage will improve your response.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but it was not successful because the shoes were too big. Therefore, I returned them to the shop and got a refund.

提案: Your answer is confusing and repetitive. Try to give a clear and concise response with specific details about your spending habits. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I usually buy shoes once a year, but sometimes I buy them more often. Generally, I prefer to buy expensive shoes because they last longer.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and lacks clarity. Provide a clear preference with reasons and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes because appearance is very important to me. Therefore, I usually choose the cutest shoes that look stylish.

× I like correcting a lot of kind of brand shoes

✓ I like collecting a lot of kinds of brand shoes

The phrase 'correcting a lot of kind of brand shoes' is incorrect because 'correcting' is the wrong verb and 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. The correct verb is 'collecting' to express the idea of acquiring shoes. Also, 'a lot of kinds of brand shoes' correctly indicates multiple types of brands.

× hopefully I want to buy us once a three month

✓ hopefully I want to buy some once every three months

The pronoun 'us' is incorrectly used here; it should be 'some' to refer to an unspecified quantity of shoes. Also, 'once a three month' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'once every three months' to indicate frequency.

× when I put on the Internet, it was too big to wear

✓ when I ordered on the Internet, it was too big to wear

The phrase 'put on the Internet' is incorrect in this context; the correct past tense verb is 'ordered' to indicate purchasing online. The rest of the sentence is acceptable.

× So I uh, boxer shop and repay the money

✓ So I went to the boxers' shop and got my money back

The original sentence lacks a proper verb and clear structure. 'Boxer shop' is unclear; assuming it means a shop selling boxers (shoes or clothing), it should be 'boxers' shop'. Also, 'repay the money' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'got my money back' to indicate a refund.

× I occasionally bring buy shoes

✓ I occasionally buy shoes

The phrase 'bring buy shoes' is incorrect; 'bring' is unnecessary and should be removed. 'Occasionally buy shoes' correctly expresses the intended meaning.

× I usually bought expensive shoes I think

✓ I usually buy expensive shoes, I think

The use of past tense 'bought' conflicts with 'usually', which indicates a habitual action. The present tense 'buy' is appropriate here to express regular behaviour.

× shoes is looks very important for me

✓ shoes look very important to me

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'look' not 'is looks'. Also, 'important for me' is better expressed as 'important to me' in English.

× Chose cutest shoes

✓ Choose the cutest shoes

The verb 'Chose' is past tense; the present tense 'Choose' fits better here. Also, 'cutest shoes' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' to indicate a specific superlative.