Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 'shopping the shoes' 대신 'shopping for shoes'를 사용하고, 중복된 'I'를 제거하세요. 또한, 문장을 간결하게 하여 명확한 주제 문장과 이유를 포함하는 것이 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I love buying shoes, but I only purchase them about once a year because they are quite expensive.

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'I had actually' 대신 'I have actually'를 사용하고, 'In the shop I wear the shoes'는 의미가 불분명하므로 제거하거나 명확히 하세요. 또한, 'buy the shoes the online' 대신 'buy shoes online'으로 수정하세요.

例: Yes, I have actually bought shoes online because it's more convenient than shopping in stores.

提案: 답변이 불명확하고 문장이 완성되지 않았습니다. 금액 단위(예: 달러, 원)를 명확히 하고, 문장을 완성하여 구체적인 정보를 제공하세요.

例: I usually spend about 10,000 won on a pair of shoes, which I think is a moderate price.

提案: 문법 오류와 중복된 단어가 있습니다. 'prefer to comfortable shoes' 대신 'prefer comfortable shoes'를 사용하고, 'can long last last long time' 대신 'can last a long time'으로 수정하세요. 또한, 이유를 더 명확하게 표현하세요.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I want to buy shoes that can last a long time.

× Uh, I love shopping the shoes but I I do not buy often.

✓ Uh, I love shopping for shoes but I do not buy them often.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'shoes' when speaking generally. Also, 'shopping' usually pairs with the preposition 'for' when referring to buying items. Additionally, the pronoun 'them' is needed to refer back to 'shoes' in the second clause. Suggestion: Use 'shopping for shoes' and 'buy them often'.

× I buy the shoes once a year because it's too expensive.

✓ I buy shoes once a year because they're too expensive.

Using 'the' before 'shoes' implies specific shoes, but here it refers to shoes in general. Also, 'it's' (it is) should be 'they're' (they are) to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'. Suggestion: Remove 'the' and use plural verb agreement.

× Yes, I had actually.

✓ Yes, I have actually.

The present perfect tense 'have' is appropriate here to indicate experience up to now, not the past perfect 'had'. Suggestion: Use 'have' for experiences.

× In the shop I wear the shoes and I buy the shoes the online.

✓ In the shop, I try on the shoes and I buy shoes online.

The phrase 'in the shop' is correct but needs a comma. 'Wear' is incorrect when referring to trying shoes; 'try on' is correct. 'The shoes the online' is incorrect; 'buy shoes online' is correct without 'the'. Suggestion: Use 'try on' and remove unnecessary articles and prepositions.

× I think about 10,000. One is most. Moderate.

✓ I usually spend about 10,000. Most of the time, it's a moderate amount.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. 'I think about 10,000' lacks context; adding 'usually spend' clarifies meaning. 'One is most. Moderate.' is unclear; rephrasing to express frequency and amount improves clarity. Suggestion: Use complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs.

× I prefer to comfortable shoes because uh, I want to buy the shoes which can long last last long time.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I want to buy shoes that can last a long time.

'Prefer to comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'prefer comfortable shoes' is correct without 'to'. 'Which can long last last long time' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'that can last a long time'. Suggestion: Remove 'to' after 'prefer' and use correct relative clause and verb form.