Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语言不够自然，有语法和表达错误，如“computation”应为“competition”，“sometimes amount of time walking”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，注意语法准确性，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: When I was a teenager, I loved buying sneakers and bought them almost twice a month because my friends and I had a competition to see who had the coolest shoes. However, now I prefer comfortable footwear since I walk a lot, so I only buy shoes occasionally, maybe once every few months.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和口语填充词过多，如“my food”应为“my foot”，表达不够流畅。建议减少口语填充词，注意词汇准确性，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Actually, I have bought almost all my shoes online because it is very convenient. I know my exact foot size, so the shoes usually fit well. Moreover, there are many options available online.

提案: 回答语法错误较多，表达不清晰，如“I'm not the pursuing to buy shoes”不正确。建议使用简单句表达观点，注意时态和语法，避免重复和冗余。

例: It really depends. I don't buy shoes every month or have a hobby of buying them. However, if I find shoes I like in a mall or store, I will buy them even if they cost around CN¥2000.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在语法和拼写错误，如“baited days”应为“busy days”，“on the daily base”应为“on a daily basis”。建议注意拼写和固定搭配的正确使用，使表达更自然。

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot and do various sports. I work out on busy days daily, so I always prioritize comfort over fashion to avoid discomfort or injuries.

× I was a big fan of sneakers and used to buy them almost twice a month because my friends and I had a kind of computation to see who had the coolest shoes.

✓ I was a big fan of sneakers and used to buy them almost twice a month because my friends and I had a kind of competition to see who had the coolest shoes.

单词“computation”意思是计算，语境中应使用“competition”表示竞争。此处属于词汇使用错误，虽然不在指定的语法错误列表中，但影响理解。

× However, nowadays I prefer comfortable footwear, sometimes amount of time walking, so I only buy shoes occasionally, maybe once every few months.

✓ However, nowadays I prefer comfortable footwear because I sometimes spend a lot of time walking, so I only buy shoes occasionally, maybe once every few months.

原句中“sometimes amount of time walking”结构不完整且不符合英语表达习惯，应补充谓语并调整结构，使句意明确。

× I think comfortable.

✓ I think comfort is important.

原句缺少谓语和完整结构，导致句子不完整。应补充完整表达，使句子语法正确。

× Well, actually all, almost all my shoes were bought online because it's very convenient and I know the exact size of my food and basically it won't be, uh, unsuitable and, uh, so, and there are a lot of resources online.

✓ Well, actually, almost all my shoes were bought online because it's very convenient and I know the exact size of my foot, so basically they won't be unsuitable, and there are a lot of resources online.

“food”应为“foot”，是拼写错误，属于词汇错误。句中“it won't be unsuitable”指代不明，应改为“they won't be unsuitable”指鞋子。

× I think it's really depends, I'm not the pursuing to buy shoes every month, I don't have a regular hobbies on buying shoes anymore.

✓ I think it really depends. I'm not pursuing buying shoes every month, and I don't have a regular hobby of buying shoes anymore.

“it's really depends”中“it's”多余，应为“it really depends”。“the pursuing”用法错误，应为“pursuing buying”。“hobbies”应为单数“hobby”，且搭配介词“of”。

× But if I made the shoes in the in the mall or in the store I will definitely buy them even if they are CN¥2000.

✓ But if I see shoes in the mall or in the store, I will definitely buy them even if they cost CN¥2000.

“made the shoes”用法错误，应为“see shoes”或“find shoes”。句子缺少逗号分隔条件状语。

× I also do various sports and I work out on the baited days on the daily base and therefore I always prioritize comfort over fashion to avoid any discomfort or injuries.

✓ I also do various sports and I work out on the rest days on a daily basis, and therefore I always prioritize comfort over fashion to avoid any discomfort or injuries.

“baited days”应为“rest days”，“on the daily base”应为“on a daily basis”，是固定搭配。

× I work out on the baited days on the daily base and therefore I always prioritize comfort over fashion to avoid any discomfort or injuries.

✓ I work out on the rest days on a daily basis, and therefore I always prioritize comfort over fashion to avoid any discomfort or injuries.

“on the daily base”应改为“on a daily basis”，这是正确的固定搭配。