Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and repetitive phrases. Use clear and grammatically correct sentences, and keep your answer concise and natural. For example, say: "Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy a pair once a month because I enjoy wearing new styles."

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy a pair once a month because I enjoy wearing new styles.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your experience clearly. For example, say: "Yes, I have bought shoes online before. However, it was disappointing because the shoes did not look like the pictures."

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. However, it was disappointing because the shoes did not look like the pictures.

提案: Work on sentence clarity and avoid filler words. Use precise vocabulary and structure your answer logically. For example: "I usually spend about five riyals on shoes. I think this price is reasonable because it is neither too cheap nor too expensive."

例: I usually spend about five riyals on shoes. I think this price is reasonable because it is neither too cheap nor too expensive.

提案: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. For example: "I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because they make me feel confident and match my outfits well."

例: I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because they make me feel confident and match my outfits well.

× I often buy a shoes UH1UH-1 beer a month

✓ I often buy shoes once a month

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, 'beer' seems to be a mispronunciation or error; it should be 'once'. The correct phrase is 'I often buy shoes once a month'.

× I like to wear a new things

✓ I like to wear new things

The phrase 'a new things' is incorrect because 'things' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'new things' without 'a'.

× That's why I think I'm obsessed with.

✓ That's why I think I'm obsessed with it.

The sentence ends abruptly with a preposition 'with' without an object. It needs an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'it' clarifies what the obsession is about.

× I bought a shoes on buy online in one of the online apps

✓ I bought shoes online using one of the online apps

Again, 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural. Also, 'on buy online' is awkward and incorrect. The correct phrase is 'bought shoes online using one of the online apps'. This corrects both the article and preposition usage.

× because it doesn't match the real photo that I see

✓ because they didn't match the real photos that I saw

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular noun, but 'shoes' is plural, so 'they' is correct. Also, the tense should be past ('didn't match' and 'saw') to match the past action of buying.

× I usually spend the five riyals on the shoes

✓ I usually spend five riyals on shoes

The definite article 'the' before 'five riyals' and 'the shoes' is unnecessary here. Also, 'five riyals' does not need 'the'. The correct phrase is 'spend five riyals on shoes'. Also, 'shoes' is plural and does not need 'the' unless referring to specific shoes.

× I think the price is a quite uh, original

✓ I think the price is quite reasonable

The word 'original' is incorrectly used to describe price. 'Reasonable' or 'fair' is more appropriate. Also, 'a quite' is incorrect; 'quite' does not need 'a' before it.

× because it is not cheap beer or expensive

✓ because it is neither cheap nor expensive

The phrase 'cheap beer or expensive' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'neither cheap nor expensive' to express a middle price range.

× so it is in the middle umm, and something normal for everyone to buy it

✓ so it is in the middle and something normal for everyone to buy

The pronoun 'it' at the end is unnecessary and awkward. The sentence flows better without it.

× I personally prefer fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes because umm, I feel convenient when I wear it

✓ I personally prefer fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes because I feel comfortable when I wear them

The word 'convenient' is incorrect here; 'comfortable' is the correct adjective to describe how shoes feel. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'.