Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Apni uttor e kichu grammar bhul ache, ar kichu kotha bar bar bola hoyeche. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor shorashori dite, ar proyojone kichu specific karon ba udahoron dite. Apnar uttor ke aro natural korte, apni chesta korun sentence gulo shohoje ar shothik bhabe gathan korte.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they are essential for daily life. I am quite selective when buying shoes because I believe they reflect a person's style and personality.

提案: Apnar uttor e onek hesitation ar filler words ache, ja uttor ke kom proshongik kore tole. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor shorashori dite, ar proyojone kichu specific karon dite. Apnar sentence gulo ke aro shothik ar natural korte practice korun.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I prefer to try them on first to make sure they are comfortable. Buying shoes without trying them can be risky and waste money.

提案: Apnar uttor e filler words onek beshi, ja uttor ke kom proshongik kore. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor shorashori dite, ar proyojone specific details dite. Apnar sentence gulo ke aro shothik ar natural korte practice korun.

例: To be honest, I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes because I have other priorities. I try to find shoes that are both comfortable and reasonably priced.

提案: Apnar uttor e kichu repetition ache ar sentence structure aro bhalo kora jaay. Apni chesta korun proshner uttor shorashori dite, ar proyojone linking words babohar kore uttor ke aro logical korte. Apnar sentence gulo ke aro shothik ar natural korte practice korun.

例: It depends on the situation. For parties or special occasions, I prefer fashionable shoes, but for daily use, I choose comfortable ones.

× Yes, I like buying shoes because shoe is a very important thing in our life.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes because shoes are very important things in our life.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match the context of general importance. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with plural subject 'shoes'. This is a singular and plural issue.

× If we want to go somewhere we need shoes so shoe is our daily need and in buying shoes I am very picky because I try to judge people after.

✓ If we want to go somewhere we need shoes so shoes are our daily need and in buying shoes I am very picky because I try to judge people after.

The word 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to agree with the plural subject. This is a singular and plural issue.

× No, I haven't because I think shoe is something that is, that feels uh comfortable, that gives us comfortable.

✓ No, I haven't because I think shoes are something that feel comfortable and give us comfort.

The pronoun 'us' is correct but the adjective 'comfortable' is misused after 'gives'. It should be the noun 'comfort'. Also, 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' and verb agreement corrected. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and adjectives issue.

× So if we buy shoes without seeing her or uh, wearing her, then I think it is not worth uh, by buying this online.

✓ So if we buy shoes without seeing them or wearing them, then I think it is not worth buying online.

The pronouns 'her' are incorrect when referring to 'shoes'. The correct pronoun is 'them' for plural objects. This is an incorrect use of pronouns issue.

× The money is not.

✓ It is not worth the money.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. It should be restructured to express the intended meaning clearly. This is a sentence structure error.

× To be honest, I really don't spend so much money on shoes because there are many other things, uh, things I need.

✓ To be honest, I really don't spend much money on shoes because there are many other things I need.

The phrase 'so much money' is less appropriate here than 'much money' in negative sentences. Also, 'things, uh, things' is redundant. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers issue.

× So I try to have a medium budget for shoes and, uh, yet comfortable and so much, uh, worthy.

✓ So I try to have a medium budget for shoes that are comfortable and worth the price.

The sentence is awkward and unclear. It needs restructuring to properly connect ideas and use correct adjectives. This is a sentence structure error.

× If I need daily basis, daily basis for go out then I try for comfortable shoes.

✓ If I need shoes for daily use, then I try to choose comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'need daily basis' is incorrect; it should be 'need shoes for daily use'. Also, 'try for' is incorrect; 'try to choose' is better. This is an incorrect use of prepositions issue.