Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to be more direct and clear, avoiding repeated phrases like 'event specialized event'. Also, provide a clearer frequency or habit to answer 'how often'.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes occasionally, especially when I need a new pair for a special occasion. However, I don't shop for shoes very often.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks coherence. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like 'so such that dress shoes on Amazon got nice benefits' and 'Self restriction'.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. For example, I purchased dress shoes on Amazon for my cousin's wedding because it was convenient and offered good prices.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant information like 'watch for the tunnel'. Be specific and clear about your spending habits, and avoid unrelated phrases.

例: I usually spend around $600 on shoes each year, mainly on dress shoes and casual pairs that I wear regularly.

提案: Your answer is quite good with clear structure and relevant details. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking phrases to enhance coherence.

例: Generally, I prefer comfortable shoes because I value practicality. However, if I'm attending a wedding or formal event, I choose fashionable shoes to match the occasion.

× Say for example, if it's going for an event specialized event that requires sourcing up, then I prefer to pass.

✓ For example, if it's a specialized event that requires dressing up, then I prefer to pass.

The phrase 'Say for example' is incorrect and redundant; 'For example' is the correct expression. Also, 'going for an event specialized event' is awkward and repetitive. The phrase 'sourcing up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'dressing up' when referring to wearing formal or special clothes.

× Remember doing this event, I think it was my cousin's wedding.

✓ I remember doing this for an event; I think it was my cousin's wedding.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper structure. Adding 'I' and 'for an event' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I was looking for some good dress shoes so such that dress shoes on Amazon got nice benefits.

✓ I was looking for some good dress shoes because dress shoes on Amazon had nice benefits.

The phrase 'so such that' is incorrect and confusing. Replacing it with 'because' clarifies the cause-effect relationship. Also, 'got nice benefits' is informal; 'had nice benefits' is more appropriate.

× Self restriction.

✓ I exercised self-restraint.

'Self restriction' is a noun phrase and not a complete sentence. Changing it to 'I exercised self-restraint' forms a complete and grammatically correct sentence.

× Well, typically spend about $600.00 something.

✓ Well, I typically spend about $600 or so.

The original sentence lacks a subject ('I') and uses 'something' awkwardly. Adding the subject and replacing 'something' with 'or so' improves clarity and correctness.

× It's just like looking for some dress shoes and watch for the tunnel.

✓ It's just like looking for some dress shoes and watching for the sale.

The phrase 'watch for the tunnel' is unclear and likely incorrect. Assuming the intended meaning is to look out for a sale or deal, 'watching for the sale' is appropriate. Also, 'watch' should be in the '-ing' form to parallel 'looking'.