Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に直接答えることが重要です。'How often?'という頻度の質問には、具体的な頻度を明確に答え、その後に詳細を述べると良いでしょう。また、文法的な誤りを避け、自然な表現を心がけてください。

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes about once every two months. I enjoy choosing different types such as pumps, sneakers, and boots.

提案: 文法の誤りを修正し、意味が明確になるように答えましょう。また、理由を述べる際には接続詞を使って論理的に話すことが大切です。

例: Yes, I have bought boots online before, but they did not fit me well. Since then, I have decided not to buy shoes online because I prefer to try them on first.

提案: 答えは明確ですが、文法と語彙の使い方を改善しましょう。'one shoes'は誤りで、単数形の'shoe'を使います。また、理由を述べる際により自然な表現を使うと良いです。

例: I usually spend around $100 on a pair of shoes because I think that price is reasonable—not too expensive but not very cheap either.

提案: 答えは理解できますが、より自然で流暢な表現を使いましょう。'collaboration with both'は不自然なので、'a combination of both'などの表現を使うと良いです。

例: I used to prefer fashionable shoes, but now I prefer comfortable ones. However, I like shoes that combine both style and comfort.

× I usually buy some various shoes like pumps, sneakers and boots.

✓ I usually buy various shoes like pumps, sneakers, and boots.

The phrase 'some various shoes' is incorrect because 'various' already implies a plural quantity, so 'some' is unnecessary and redundant. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' in a list of three or more items (Oxford comma) for clarity.

× It's like once.

✓ It's about once.

The phrase 'It's like once' is informal and unclear. Using 'about once' is more appropriate to indicate frequency. Also, 'like' as a filler word is informal and should be avoided in formal speech.

× Yes, I have bought a boots online and it doesn't match my size.

✓ Yes, I have bought boots online and they didn't match my size.

The word 'boots' is plural, so 'a' (which is singular) should not be used. Also, 'it' should be changed to 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'boots'. Additionally, the verb tense should be consistent; 'didn't match' is more appropriate for a past event.

× So since then I decided not to buy online and I try.

✓ So since then, I decided not to buy online and I haven't tried since.

The sentence mixes past tense 'decided' with present tense 'try'. To maintain consistency, 'haven't tried' (present perfect) is better to indicate the action has not occurred since the decision. Also, a comma after 'then' improves readability.

× MMM mostly I spend $100 for one shoes because it's not quite expensive but not super cheap.

✓ MMM mostly I spend $100 for one pair of shoes because they're not quite expensive but not super cheap.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so 'one shoes' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'one pair of shoes'. Also, 'it's' should be changed to 'they're' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× But I do love collaboration with both.

✓ But I do love a combination of both.

The word 'collaboration' is incorrect in this context; 'combination' is the correct noun to express liking both fashionable and comfortable shoes together. Also, 'a combination of both' is the proper phrase.