Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免使用口语化的数字“1”，并且可以更自然地表达对买鞋的态度，同时注意句子简洁。

例: I don't particularly enjoy buying shoes because it takes me a long time to find the right pair, so I don't buy them very often.

提案: 回答中可以使用更多连接词使句子更连贯，同时避免绝对化的词汇如“all”。

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because I enjoy shopping on Taobao; however, I found that many shoes are of low quality and it's difficult to return them.

提案: 表达金额时应更自然，避免使用“at the rate of”，并且可以补充更多细节说明为什么贵的鞋更舒适。

例: I usually spend about 1000 yuan on shoes because I believe that more expensive shoes tend to be more comfortable and durable.

提案: 注意语法错误，如“am tend to”应为“tend to”，并且避免口语缩写“'cause”，句子应更正式和流畅。

例: When I was younger, I preferred fashionable shoes, but now I tend to choose comfortable ones because I don't want my feet to hurt while working in the office.

× Honestly I don't really enjoy buying shoes because it always takes me a lot of time to select a suitable 1 and I rarely buy shoes.

✓ Honestly I don't really enjoy buying shoes because it always takes me a lot of time to select a suitable pair and I rarely buy shoes.

这里'suitable 1'中的'1'应为复数形式的量词，正确表达应为'suitable pair'，表示“一双合适的鞋子”。

× Yes, I used to buy shoes online because I really enjoy shopping on Taobao, but I found that the shoes are all low quality and it's hard to send them back.

✓ Yes, I used to buy shoes online because I really enjoy shopping on Taobao, but I found that the shoes are all of low quality and it's hard to send them back.

'low quality'前应加介词短语'of'，正确表达为'all of low quality'，表示“全部质量都很差”。

× I usually buy shoes at the rate of around CN¥1000 because I think the expensive shoes are more comfortable.

✓ I usually buy shoes at a rate of around CN¥1000 because I think expensive shoes are more comfortable.

'at the rate of around'中'the'不合适，应为'a rate'，且'expensive shoes'前不需要定冠词'the'，因为泛指昂贵的鞋子。

× If I were younger I would say the fashionable shoes, but for now I am tend to choose the comfortable shoes 'cause I don't want make my feet sore when I am working in my office.

✓ If I were younger I would say fashionable shoes, but for now I tend to choose comfortable shoes because I don't want to make my feet sore when I am working in my office.

'I am tend'应改为'I tend'，因为'tend'是动词，不用加'am'。'the fashionable shoes'和'the comfortable shoes'应去掉定冠词'the'，因为这里泛指鞋子。'cause'应改为'because'，更正式。'don't want make'应为'don't want to make'，动词不定式需要'to'。