Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит много пауз и повторений, что снижает его естественность. Постарайтесь говорить более связно и избегать лишних слов, чтобы ответ был более эффективным и понятным.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase a new pair each season, such as heels, boots, or sneakers, depending on the weather.

提案: В вашем ответе много повторений слова "usually" и пауз. Используйте связующие слова для улучшения логики и избегайте повторов, чтобы сделать речь более плавной.

例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I know my foot size well. Moreover, I usually purchase sneakers online since they are not available in local stores, so I order them from other countries.

提案: Ваш ответ не отвечает напрямую на вопрос о сумме денег. Старайтесь давать конкретные ответы и использовать связующие слова для логичности. Также избегайте грамматических ошибок.

例: I usually spend a reasonable amount on shoes because I believe comfort and quality are important, so I don't mind paying more for good shoes.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и незавершённые мысли. Постарайтесь строить полные предложения и использовать связующие слова для ясности и связности.

例: Although comfort and durability are important, I prefer fashionable shoes because I am very interested in fashion and appearance matters a lot to me.

× I know my foot size and this is not a problem for me to buy a proper uh shoes.

✓ I know my foot size and this is not a problem for me to buy proper shoes.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' before 'proper shoes' corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× Usually I buy sneakers online because usually we don't have them in our shops so I need to buy shoes from other countries.

✓ Usually I buy sneakers online because usually we don't have them in our shops, so I need to buy shoes from other countries.

This sentence is grammatically correct in terms of singular/plural usage; no correction needed here.

× I believe that there are two main things that you don't have to save money for.

✓ I believe that there are two main things for which you don't have to save money.

The phrase 'save money for' is awkward here; rephrasing to 'things for which you don't have to save money' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× It's your purse and shoes because on how good is your shoes depends how comfortable you feel during the day and also shoes should be good quality.

✓ It's your purse and shoes because how good your shoes are determines how comfortable you feel during the day, and also shoes should be of good quality.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and awkward phrasing. Correcting the word order and adding 'of' before 'good quality' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× As I really interested in fashion, I would choose a fashionable shoes.

✓ As I am really interested in fashion, I would choose fashionable shoes.

'Shoes' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Also, the verb 'am' is missing after 'I' to form the correct present tense.

× As I really interested in fashion, I would choose a fashionable shoes.

✓ As I am really interested in fashion, I would choose fashionable shoes.

The verb 'am' is missing after 'I' to correctly form the present tense 'I am really interested'. Adding 'am' corrects the tense error.

× Of course it's important for shoes to be comfortable and durable, but for me the good looking is very important thing so I. Read alike.

✓ Of course, it's important for shoes to be comfortable and durable, but for me, good looks are very important, so I...

The phrase 'the good looking is very important thing' is incorrect; it should be 'good looks are very important'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly and 'Read alike' seems out of place; it is omitted for clarity.