Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repetition and unclear phrases. For example, "shoe shoes" is redundant and "a good it in one pair of global shoes" is unclear. Use simpler, clearer sentences and correct grammar to sound more natural.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't buy them often because good quality shoes are quite expensive. So, I prefer to invest in one good pair and use them until they are worn out.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words properly and avoid incomplete sentences. For example, "rather than the physical stores" should be "than physical stores" and the last sentence is incomplete.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times because online stores usually offer better discounts and promotions than physical stores. Additionally, you can use vouchers or coupons to save more money, but it can be uncertain since you cannot try the shoes before buying.

提案: Avoid filler words like "umm" and incomplete sentences. Be more precise and clear. Also, avoid redundancy like "on shoes" twice. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I usually spend a maximum of 200 ringgit on shoes because I like sports shoes, which typically cost between 100 and 200 ringgit. Therefore, I tend to buy only one pair at a time to avoid having too many shoes.

提案: Correct unclear words and phrases, such as "stylish food right" and "comfortable and questionable". Use clear vocabulary and avoid incomplete sentences. Link ideas smoothly.

例: I usually prioritize comfortable shoes because they are better for my feet, especially when I have to walk a lot during the day. However, I also like fashionable shoes, so I try to find a balance between comfort and style.

× good quality shoe shoes tend to be quite expensive

✓ good quality shoes tend to be quite expensive

The phrase 'shoe shoes' is redundant and incorrect. The correct plural form is 'shoes' to refer to multiple items. Remove the extra 'shoe' to fix the plural issue.

× Therefore I invest in buying a good it in one pair of global shoes and use it until they worn out

✓ Therefore I invest in buying a good pair of global shoes and use them until they are worn out

The phrase 'a good it in one pair' is incorrect and confusing. 'Pair' is singular and should be followed by plural pronouns 'them' and 'they are' for agreement. Also, 'worn out' needs the auxiliary verb 'are' to form the present perfect passive.

× online stores usually offer better discount and promotions rather than the physical stores

✓ online stores usually offer better discounts and promotions than physical stores

'Discount' should be plural 'discounts' to match 'promotions'. Also, 'rather than' is better replaced with 'than' for comparisons. 'The physical stores' should be 'physical stores' as a general reference.

× you cannot try the shoes right away on your

✓ you cannot try the shoes right away on yourself

The pronoun 'your' is incomplete and incorrect here. The reflexive pronoun 'yourself' is needed to indicate trying on the shoes personally.

× I don't want to accommodate umm too much shoes

✓ I don't want to accommodate too many shoes

'Much' is used with uncountable nouns, but 'shoes' is countable plural. Therefore, 'too many' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns.

× So I try to find a balance between both comfortable and questionable

✓ So I try to find a balance between both comfortable and fashionable shoes

The word 'questionable' is incorrect in this context; likely intended was 'fashionable'. Also, the phrase should include the noun 'shoes' for clarity and correct sentence structure.