Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid vague phrases like 'I'm not a sure person'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I usually buy them once a year. I prefer comfortable shoes like Crocs and half shoes because they suit my daily needs.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and lacks coherence. Use correct verb tenses and linking words to make your answer clearer. Also, be more specific about your experience with online shoe shopping.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online because there are many offers and the prices are cheaper. However, one pair I bought was a bit loose, so I didn't wear them often.

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using better sentence structure and linking words. Also, specify the currency for clarity and avoid repetition.

例: I usually spend under 2000 rupees on shoes because I prefer affordable shopping. I look for simple, cheap, yet good quality products within my budget.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'Uh'.

例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I value comfort in all my clothing choices. For me, feeling comfortable throughout the day is more important than following fashion trends.

× I buy yearly ones because I like half shoes and Crocs because I am comfortable with that kind of shoes.

✓ I buy yearly ones because I like half shoes and Crocs because I am comfortable with those kinds of shoes.

The phrase 'that kind of shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural, so the quantifier should be plural as well, i.e., 'those kinds of shoes'. This ensures agreement between the quantifier and the noun it modifies.

× I don't wore that shoes so many times.

✓ I haven't worn those shoes so many times.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'don't wore' which mixes present tense auxiliary 'do' with past tense verb 'wore'. The correct form is present perfect 'haven't worn' to indicate an action that has not happened many times up to now.

× there is lots of offers and we get in very cheap right and we get nice good looking shoes.

✓ there are lots of offers and we get them very cheaply, right, and we get nice good-looking shoes.

'Lots of offers' is plural, so 'there is' should be 'there are'. Also, 'get in very cheap' is incorrect; the adverb 'cheaply' should be used to modify the verb 'get'. Additionally, 'nice good looking shoes' should be hyphenated as 'nice good-looking shoes' to correctly form the compound adjective.

× I don't wore that shoes so many times.

✓ I haven't worn those shoes so many times.

The verb 'wore' is past tense, but the auxiliary 'don't' is present tense, causing a tense inconsistency. The correct form is present perfect 'haven't worn' to express an action that has not occurred frequently up to now.

× I buy under 2000 that my budget for buying shoes.

✓ I buy shoes under 2000; that is my budget for buying shoes.

The original sentence lacks clarity and proper quantifier usage. Adding 'shoes' after 'buy' clarifies the object, and separating the budget statement improves sentence structure.

× I am the person I want always comfortable with dresses peoples around me.

✓ I am the person who always wants to be comfortable with the people around me.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I want always comfortable' and 'dresses peoples'. 'Who' is the correct relative pronoun for 'person'. 'Always wants to be comfortable' is the correct verb phrase, and 'people' is the correct plural noun, not 'peoples'.

× I want a comfortable space for me in every time.

✓ I want a comfortable space for myself at all times.

The phrase 'in every time' is incorrect; the correct prepositional phrase is 'at all times'. Also, 'for me' should be 'for myself' to correctly use the reflexive pronoun.