Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid repeating the same idea and be more concise. Use a variety of expressions to sound more natural and effective. For example, instead of repeating 'buying shoes', you can say 'shopping for footwear' or 'getting new pairs'. Also, mention how often you buy shoes to fully answer the question.

例: Yes, I really enjoy shopping for footwear and often buy new pairs every few months because I like to keep my collection updated.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by providing a bit more detail. Also, avoid repeating similar words like 'buying' and 'shopping'.

例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once; however, I usually prefer shopping in physical stores because ordering the wrong size online can be problematic, and returning items is often complicated.

提案: Try to give a more specific answer with estimated amounts or frequency to enrich your response. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent and avoid redundancy.

例: Honestly, I don't set a strict budget for shoes; however, I usually spend around 50 to 100 dollars every few months, depending on my needs and sales.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'there were incidents' and be more specific.

例: I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because I enjoy keeping up with trends; however, sometimes this choice causes discomfort during long walks.

× I have bought shoes online once.

✓ I have bought shoes online once.

No grammar mistake related to quantifiers here, sentence is correct.

× I prefer buying shoes from the shop personally because when you're buying or shopping online you could order the wrong size which can be really hard to get a refund later.

✓ I prefer buying shoes from the shop personally because when you're buying or shopping online, you could order the wrong size, which can make it really hard to get a refund later.

Added commas for clarity and changed 'can be' to 'can make it' to improve sentence flow and clarity. No direct grammar problem from the list but improved sentence structure.

× I don't have a budget for shoes or shopping.

✓ I don't have a budget for shoes or shopping.

Sentence is correct; no quantifier error.

× I'm someone who buys things randomly so I can't recall how much specifically I have for shoes or any other shopping items.

✓ I'm someone who buys things randomly, so I can't recall exactly how much I spend on shoes or any other shopping items.

Added comma before 'so' for sentence clarity and changed 'specifically I have' to 'exactly how much I spend' for natural expression. No direct grammar problem from the list but improved sentence structure.

× I would choose fashionable shoes than comfortable shoes because there were an incidents where I used to wear or buy fashionable shoes rather than buying a comfortable.

✓ I would choose fashionable shoes over comfortable shoes because there were incidents where I used to wear or buy fashionable shoes rather than comfortable ones.

Changed 'than' to 'over' for correct comparison (Grammar problem type ID 16: Incorrect conjunction use). Removed 'an' before 'incidents' (plural noun) and changed 'a comfortable' to 'comfortable ones' for correct plural reference (Grammar problem type ID 1: Singular and plural issue).