Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but not very natural or effective. Try to use present tense consistently and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of saying "I often went to the mall with my family to go buy shoes because I need shoes," you can say "I often go to the mall with my family to buy shoes because I need them." Also, try to keep your answer within 5 sentences and add a linking word if you provide more details.

例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I often go to the mall with my family to buy new shoes because I need comfortable ones for daily use. Sometimes, I also check online stores for the latest styles. Overall, I enjoy shopping for shoes as it allows me to update my wardrobe.

提案: Your answer is too short and does not provide enough information. Try to give a complete sentence and add some supporting details to make your answer more natural and effective. For example, you can explain why you have not bought shoes online or if you plan to do so in the future.

例: No, I haven't bought shoes online yet because I prefer to try them on in the store to make sure they fit well. However, I might consider buying shoes online in the future if I find a good deal or if I am too busy to go shopping.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to answer the question directly with a specific amount or range, and explain briefly if needed. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to organize your answer logically.

例: I usually spend around 300 to 500 Hong Kong dollars on a pair of shoes because I want good quality and comfort. Sometimes, I wait for sales to get better prices, which helps me save money.

提案: Your answer does not address the question at all. Please respond directly to the question with a clear preference and supporting reasons. Use complete sentences and avoid informal or irrelevant remarks.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I often walk a lot during the day. Although fashionable shoes look nice, comfort is more important to me to avoid foot pain.

× I often went to the mall with my family to go buy shoes because I need shoes.

✓ I often go to the mall with my family to buy shoes because I need shoes.

The sentence mixes past tense 'went' with present tense 'need'. Since the question asks about a habitual action, the present tense 'go' is appropriate to maintain consistency and express regular activity.

× Like $1.00 I think 'cause like my mom is not really good, so I can't calculate the the amount of money I need to spend on the shoes.

✓ I usually spend about $1.00 because my mom is not very good at math, so I can't calculate the amount of money I need to spend on shoes.

The original sentence uses 'like' informally and has unclear quantifier usage. Replacing 'like' with 'about' clarifies the approximate amount. Also, 'not really good' is vague; specifying 'not very good at math' clarifies the meaning.

× So that that means like this is very hard and I think I need some time to think about this question.

✓ That means this is very hard, and I think I need some time to think about this question.

The original sentence has redundant words ('that that') and informal fillers ('like'). Removing redundancy and fillers improves clarity and sentence structure.