Shoes— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and unclear phrases. Use clear linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your preferences.

例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially comfortable ones rather than heels or sandals. I usually purchase shoes once a year because I prefer investing in high-quality pairs that last a long time.

提案: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve fluency. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons for your hesitation about online shopping.

例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I hesitate due to concerns about the size fitting properly and the uncertainty about the shoes' quality.

提案: Make your answer more fluent by reducing filler words and structuring your sentences clearly. Use linking words to explain your reasoning and be specific about your spending habits.

例: I usually spend around $300 on shoes because I prefer high-quality products that last longer, so investing more money ensures their durability.

提案: Improve sentence structure and clarity by avoiding repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide reasons.

例: I prefer comfortable shoes over fashionable ones because comfort is my priority. Since I invest a lot in shoes, I believe they must be comfortable to justify the cost.

× I personally prefer shoes rather than heels and sandals like stuff.

✓ I personally prefer shoes to heels and sandals.

The phrase 'prefer ... rather than ...' is incorrect here; the correct preposition to use with 'prefer' when comparing two things is 'to'. So, 'prefer shoes to heels and sandals' is the correct form.

× I usually buy shoes once a year like I'm taking expensive ones so I can keep it.

✓ I usually buy shoes once a year, like expensive ones, so I can keep them.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes' which is plural, so it should be 'them'. Also, 'taking expensive ones' is awkward; 'like expensive ones' is clearer.

× No, I never bought shoes online because I feel hesitated to do online shopping.

✓ No, I have never bought shoes online because I feel hesitant to do online shopping.

The present perfect tense 'have never bought' is appropriate for experiences up to now. Also, 'feel hesitated' is incorrect; the adjective 'hesitant' should be used after 'feel'.

× I realized that it is uh, not such a good thing to buy online because I feel like uh, this size will may change and the I don't know about the quality of the shoes.

✓ I realized that it is not such a good thing to buy online because I feel like the size may change and I don't know about the quality of the shoes.

The modal verbs 'will' and 'may' should not be used together; only one modal verb is needed. Also, 'the I' is a typo and should be 'and I'.

× I usually buy high quality, uh products, so it is obviously expensive, so it may be like $300 somewhere like that, so I can ensure the quality of the shoes by uh spending more money so I can keep that.

✓ I usually buy high-quality products, so they are obviously expensive, maybe around $300, so I can ensure the quality of the shoes by spending more money and keep them.

'High quality' should be hyphenated as 'high-quality' when used as an adjective. 'It is' should be 'they are' to agree with plural 'products'. 'So it may be like $300 somewhere like that' is awkward; 'maybe around $300' is clearer. 'Keep that' should be 'keep them' referring to shoes.

× I do prefer comfortable shoes because the comfort is first.

✓ I do prefer comfortable shoes because comfort comes first.

'The comfort is first' is awkward; the phrase 'comfort comes first' is a natural expression.

× It is very important to be comfortable rather than fashion it to me.

✓ It is very important to be comfortable rather than fashionable to me.

'Fashion' is a noun; the adjective 'fashionable' should be used here. Also, 'fashion it' is incorrect; the sentence compares 'comfortable' and 'fashionable'.

× So I believe because I am investing so much, I believe the comfort must.

✓ So I believe, because I am investing so much, that comfort is a must.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'that' and completing the thought with 'comfort is a must' makes it grammatically correct and clearer.